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    Junior Member Ryousukethehappy's Avatar
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    Working on a manga project for months, Advice/Ideas needed

    Ive been working on my manga for a while but im not intirely happy about it heres a section of it(original scan):



    And heres the one ive scanned and done some of on CS5 Photoshop:



    I have started putting effect lines but i havent finished it.

    I would really like some advise/ideas to better it thanks.

    I just realised that i just posted my topic in the wrong section lol im going to link it from manga works...

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    If you cant see the pics heres the links to them:

    [link='http://www.mangatutorials.com/index.php?do=/Sean_Long/photo/view/manga-project-original-copy/']http://www.mangatutorials.com/index.php?do=/Sean_Long/photo/view/manga-project-original-copy/[/link]


    [link='http://www.mangatutorials.com/index.php?do=/Sean_Long/photo/view/manga-project-1-2/']http://www.mangatutorials.com/index.php?do=/Sean_Long/photo/view/manga-project-1-2/[/link]

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    Well, I think it's still too early at this point. Hmm...even though they're brothers, they need to look more different from each other. Outrageously different hair or clothes maybe? I mean, unless they're twins lol.

    What's the manga about? Besides sibling rivalry with swords lol.

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    i will scan the script once i find it mind you this is like half way into the book.

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    I like it but it is a lot of text for me It sounds like a great story im sure but I am thinking i had a hard time reading it on the 2nd page but i read it a 2nd time and got it, I see the art is great reprinting it in the 2nd pic, so maybe you can use a TTF to do the words, was that your plan rite?


    Its great!

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    well yea its a working progress,im still getting use to photoshop.oh yea my mate got me to do this for him so i did the txt like this heres the link:

    http://www.mangatutorials.com/index.php?do=/Sean_Long/photo/view/james-manga-project-done-on-photoshop/

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    I think it's looking pretty good so far (I do agree with the current suggestions, though.)

    One thing I might suggest on the third panel, with the focus lines. Either make them go all around, or at least half way around the panel. It looks a little unfinished (which, I know the whole page isn't done, but I wasn't sure if all those panels were considered complete or not.)

    I like how clean your lines are and the progression so far.

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    yea i know i havent finshed that just yet the effects take alot of time to do

    heres the back story,thers still more i havent finshed the draft
    (mind you i copyed this from the draft from my cell lol)

    story of demon code:

    Summary of demon code:
    A war broke out between human
    and vampire on the planet
    Hexion.
    before the war 70% of humans
    were under threat by vampire
    rebels. so the Hexion
    government declared war on the
    vampire rebels.
    because of war inoccent
    vampires and humans got
    killed in result vampires ether
    fled or got run off by the
    Hexion government.

    After escaping the vampires
    found a new planet and named
    it Zartei after the vampire god of
    hope.the planet had never seen
    daylight but rumour gos that
    Zartei sees light every 1000 years
    .after the vampires being run off
    Hexion the new Zartei
    goverment established a top
    secret research facility dedicated
    to destroying the human race.
    after years of reseach the
    vampires had finally developed
    the most deadlyest super
    weapon it wasnt a war machine
    but a super solider capable of
    taking down nearly anything in
    its path.the only few weaknesses
    was the user would go rouge
    and destroy anything including
    its allys meaning it would be
    extremely hard to control his/her
    urges.
    the project was named demon
    code, when testing the project
    the test subject went completely
    rouge and in the end the subject
    completely destroyed the facility
    and then killed himself.
    after the test being a complete
    failure the project was
    abandoned and the facility was
    put under lock down and anyone
    who was caught trespassing
    would be shot. later that year
    both the Hexion and Zartei
    governmets signed a peace
    treaty shortly after the war. 30%
    of vampires returned to Hexion
    45% of vampires stayed on
    Zartei and the remaining
    vampires who really hated the
    humans created the skull
    hunters to achieve their main
    goal to hunt down and kill
    humans.the Hexion government
    heard the news from spies
    working on Zartei and formed
    the secret military force called
    the shadow wolfs to repel skull
    hunters from Hexion.

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    Hmm...it's definitely interesting and unique.

    So, break it down; who is/are the main character(s), and what's their story got to do with this backstory?

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    thank you everyone for you helpIve put the names with a mix of English and japanese) Main character:Ryousuke Halks (Nickname:Ry)
    Other main characters:Ryouu Helms(nickname: Lance),Serika Trinx(no nick name at the moment,she later falls i lover with Ry)
    Esumi Myko(no nick name but im still thinking if she falls in love with Lance),Kumi(no nick name but i havent decieded on her last name,she would be the girl who "loves Ry" and trys to suduce him)Takeshi Halks(not sure on his nick name yet,he's the brother of ry)

    ill put back story up soon thanks

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