05-13-2012, 05:28 AM
your composition is awesome*o*! i noticed in the second panel that the brunette's hips appear to have gotten wider, though.
05-13-2012, 12:55 PM
As much as I hate your guts Ram I really think you're a very good artist.
05-14-2012, 05:12 AM
Teacup Ninja Tots
That's not very nice Sylux
05-18-2012, 09:54 AM
Thanks Cloudy but I was the first one who bully Sylux joking that I will hit on her sister so I don't deserve to be protected.
@mereana, I'm probably not capable of editing that either way and I can get away with it if it's just a simple hip. but thanks for the crit.
Here's an incomplete pic that you can crit.
I noticed I got a big problem when it comes to drawing bigger one and small one so ima planning to rewrite the big one.
05-18-2012, 04:40 PM
Three Trio Tres Member
That girl sitting one the floor seems a bit uncomfortable, Especially the her right leg. Maybe its the way you align the shoe laces. hmmm..its just looking real funny for me.
Aside from that, things are prettty tight!
05-18-2012, 07:10 PM
Shoe laces huh... Ok I'll try to edit that.
05-19-2012, 06:16 AM
actually, i copied her pose, and it's not that uncomfortable,i think it just appears that way because it;s such an unusual position.
also, where are the dialogue bubbles going to go? stuff like that can make or break a page /8
05-19-2012, 07:03 AM
I actually did too.. man I look so lame on the mirror OTL
Originally Posted by WhenRabbitsAttack
I already calculated where the speech bubble would go, There would be some detail there that would be covered but it doesn't matter that much.
I just hide the speech bubble so it can be critique properly.
05-19-2012, 05:05 PM
101 Dalmations Member
One comment on the previous page (on the previous page): make the background less prominent > make the girl stand out more to the background. Especially in that panel with the tv in the background. It's distracting a bit (for me), you could try and make it a little bit lighter
05-20-2012, 05:22 AM
I'll remember to edit that on my finishing touch, as for now I'll leave that there, thank's for the Crit