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    Fifty Fifty Member Evil_Cake's Avatar
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    cool full color

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    Palindrome Member ClockHand's Avatar
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    Jubeh@ Thanks. Well the "Butt" in that sentese was made it to look like a little humoristic.

    Cake@ Thanks man.

    Well I'm going to try to work some details, some stuffs are not looking to good (maybe it's because I just change the size without looking the quaility after it).

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    ハリセン クラプ Ace Pitcher Hayashida's Avatar
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    Great comic, Clock. I'm looking forward to reading more.

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    Yeah, this is pretty cool. I like the art style and the coloring, and it's all put together very well. The occasional grammatical error/lack of punctuation is a bit jarring for me at times, though.

    Great work!

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    Palindrome Member ClockHand's Avatar
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    Thanks people.

    Nyar@ Mmm... I did the dialogues to be kinda southerns, and it was with some help (because me doing it be myself it would end being awful). So any mistake that works and an advice or correction that could work on the context, is appreciated.

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    Well, the dialogue is good and the phrasing is definitely Western - I just tend to pay a lot of attention to minor typesetting details >_> What I noticed is that you sometimes end lines with punctuation and sometimes don't. With fonts that have capital and lowercase letters, like the one you're using, I think it looks best to always end with some sort of punctuation, even if it's just ellipsis (...). It's not a big deal, but it's just the kind of thing I take note of.

    The only typo I found was on page 6 - should be 'needs a lesson'

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    Palindrome Member ClockHand's Avatar
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    ok cool. I'm fixing stuffs so I'm going to add those to my fix list.

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    He said butt because he's a gentleman of course! xD

    Really cool, Clock

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