The intro page is beautiful, but I feel it's lacking in, well, introducing.
Everything about it is top notch, but the two (main?) characters on the cover are waaaay in the mid-ground. They gotta be more in your face--KAPOW! MY NAME'S ELLEN!
In short, make the girls the focal point. The same poses, but more zoomed in might make it work.
The second page looks nice. I think the last panel should have more emphasis on the random-ass destruction. Motion lines, variation in, lighting, etc.
Good job so far!


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