@Seefy - The self portrait was like, "Okay, that looks good--but the eye is open in the corner, and it looks like anime. I'll just fix that real quick--oh crap, it looks more like anime now! Maybe if I outline it and--DERP."
@Bacon - Sorry, I'm kinda seeing what you mean on Atemi's tits, but it looks right to me. Do you have some way you could draw over it show me what you mean? It looks right to me, but the fact that you see something wrong means there's most likely something wrong. Also, you're completely right about the girl's (Flandre's) arm. I wanted her to be resting her arm on Sanae's head, but that doesn't work in the way I drew it.
Also, guys, I need help:
I need to get a digitally shaded or colored version of this done by sometime later this month. How can I go about doing that? I have very little experience in value and all that, but I've seen people on Conceptart do this kind of stuff like it's child's play.
The actual canvas is 5000x3625 so I can safely scale it down and still have a large print.