I like the WIP and wanna see it finished. So:
You might wanna take this with a grain of salt. I might have just caught a red herring here, and since I didn't draw the full thing out, I can't be sure of my claims up there. Also, our styles are on opposite ends of the realism spectrum and you're the one more qualified to be critiquing a semi-realistic style.
/excuses for not being a good critter.