Trying to get the hang of songwriting, having difficulty. Attempted chorus of what would probably be some sort of pop song:
Either through inexperience or something else, I can't see anything technically wrong with it, yet it seems incomplete.Down on your knees
Praise your new master
Do as I please
Or I'll cause disaster
I am that boy
The one you betrayed
I'll make you my toy
I'll make you afraid


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