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    Another in progress, this time chun li:

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    One Thousand Member JJJorgie's Avatar
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    Not bad

    The far eye should be the same height and the closer one. The closer forearm is too thin (since it's in perspective, it should be thicker connecting to the hand). Its elbow is also too thin. The closer leg is too long. The far leg is just really strange. I can't figure out what part is visible. The hand closest to the face is too big. In its position, it's right beside the face, therefore they should be the same height. The waist is a little thin, especially considering her muscular build. The far breast is at an odd perspective (it's straight on while the other is at an appropriate angled view). The thumb of the closest hand is a little short.
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    Ill leave the anatomy crits to others, just wanna highlight, your line work is rather thick, which is ok, but try to use more line weight in certain areas, this will give the image more depth.

    Areas such as the hand markings (im not sure what they are called T_T), the folds, pattern on her clothes, or even lighter material such as the ribbon on her head, you can use a thinner lines. The variances in line weight will help make certain areas pop out more C:

    Keep it up!

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    Thanks so much JJJorgie, there were some things that were off I didn't notice right away. I included a red lines version to double check if everything looks good. Although the second leg is really bothering me for some reason. It doesn't make any sense being there, but I wanted to make the image overall slightly more dynamic. That leg behind is supposed to come to a point where it's further behind in perspective, but I suppose it doesn't make any sense to the image. She's supposed to look like she's ready to kick something.



    @doghateburger: You're right, I was experimenting with that idea in my head, but I got carried away with the art that the lines eventually got thicker. I think you also mean palm marks? Wrinkles? I was considering thinner lines for the patterns on her cloths, but sometimes I think when I'm considering line weight in perspective then I get a little confused. But, overall in a polished drawing, I do consider and make lines thinner for lighter materials, or little details. Thanks for the suggestion though, I'll put that in my next drawing's!

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    Yo Red these are looking pretty good.
    Am not that good with critics but yeah i would like to add in my two cents..
    The thumb of her right hand seems to be broke maybe thats coz you haven't drawn its base like you have for her left hand.Those legs really need work.
    I would say practice doing some quick gesture drawing with long free strokes as it would help with the flow and energy that your drawings lack as of now and try to use your entire hand and not just your wrist when you draw.It helps avoid choppy lines.

    Just practice and i like how you have been trying to implement what you have learnt from other's critics in your wips. You are on the right track sm pretty sure you will improve in no time :] \m/

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    The redline looks a lot better! Going along with what alcoro said about the thumb: in the position that the hand's in, the thumb should only reach the middle finger when angled in (basically, straighten it up to a steeper angle). Also, with such hugely muscled legs, only the top of the calf of the closest leg will touch the thigh (as the calf narrows into the ankle, there will be a gap widening away from the thigh). Also, the ankle will be almost directly below the butt. Yours extends past it. I agree that your legs need a bit of work. You draw them like males' legs. Girls are slenderer and the knee isn't usually so prominent.

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    The redline looks a lot better! Going along with what alcoro said about the thumb: in the position that the hand's in, the thumb should only reach the middle finger when angled in (basically, straighten it up to a steeper angle). Also, with such hugely muscled legs, only the top of the calf of the closest leg will touch the thigh (as the calf narrows into the ankle, there will be a gap widening away from the thigh). Also, the ankle will be almost directly below the butt. Yours extends past it. I agree that your legs need a bit of work. You draw them like males' legs. Girls are slenderer and the knee isn't usually so prominent.
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    It has been quite some time, how is everyone?
    Real life things has caught up with me, but I'm much more stable now. A bit busier, but I'm doing ok. Getting some martial arts in to clear my head from time to time.
    I haven't forgotten about the things to improve from last time and I'm always thinking about taking my art to the next level (you guys are fantastic critique-rs btw). Doing studies are really tough for me, because I always like to apply what I learned to my own drawing's- which is okay, but not ideal if I want to seriously dedicate to a specific kind of study. I just need a little push of motivation to get through, then I'll be alright.

    For drawings, I don't have alot since I was quite busy. So here we go:

    Probably my best inking I have done so far on my fav ninja girl. There are some mistakes regarding either the perspective, or the length of some body parts (ex: her left leg).
    http://i1299.photobucket.com/albums/...ps23361294.jpg
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    I have a colored version too in cel-shade like style.
    http://fav.me/d6r7in9
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    Megaman and bass. The coloring is still a little rough, but it's a wip.

    http://i1299.photobucket.com/albums/...ps27e043e4.jpg
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    Metagross from pokemon.
    http://fav.me/d737s50

    And finally a work in progress of ryu, ken and akuma. I'm most likely going to change the pose for akuma, it's not the way I imagined this picture lol.
    http://i1299.photobucket.com/albums/...ps4cf4d37c.jpg
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    The rest, I've done a bit of graphic design work. Hope that still counts as working towards art ^^;

    A kitty eatting a cupcake icon. It's so adorable.
    http://i1299.photobucket.com/albums/...s5b77ea8e.jpeg
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    A devil may cry graphic design pic of virgil.
    http://i1299.photobucket.com/albums/...ps1ce7735c.jpg
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    Some more megaman swag, but with the original bosses in it.
    http://fav.me/d6x7r4d

    I think that's all I have for now... I don't have any practice's or studies in my sketchbook that I can show atm, they're just basic sketches. but I hope you guys enjoy it. I'll post some more later on when I'm not as busy.

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