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    Red face AlexP is in need of some constructive criticism.

    After yet another boring day at enormously boring work I've decided to try to draw. And this is pretty much results of Monday - Friday

    Monday:
    https://dl.dropboxusercontent.com/u/...esult%2001.png
    Known issues: it's kinda bad thing overall There is no symmetry and nose is... just... horrible.

    Tuesday:
    https://dl.dropboxusercontent.com/u/...esult%2002.png
    In here it kiiiiinda looks like she's high on something, but it's not
    Known issues: I really don't like how her further eye looks here. And part of face sorta... pops out...also I think nose is turned way into wrong side. Should be less and kinda more um... central oriented. I'm bad with terms yet...

    Wednesday:
    https://dl.dropboxusercontent.com/u/...esult%2003.png
    Known issues: eyes are not on proper level and alignment, shading on her forward plait is way wrong... not sure why, but don't like mouth too. Something iffy is going on with it!

    Thursday:
    https://dl.dropboxusercontent.com/u/...esult%2004.png
    Known issues: horrible eyes again. They're way too big for such size of the face. And I think I messed up with left side. Her body seems to be wider there then needed.

    Friday:
    https://dl.dropboxusercontent.com/u/...esult%2001.png
    Known issues: finger nail is inconsistent That finger on top-left of the picture doesn't look like proper finger. Maybe shading at the bottom is little bit off.

    So... it's most likely that I have to start using some technics and tutorials from glorious internet, but still. Is there something on this pictures that I don't see and I wasn't told about?

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    One of the things that I noticed is that on the two front facing drawings the necks look to long, I would also suggest looking at 3/4 perspective drawings of heads on the internet. I like the expressions that you drew
    For tutorials, there is a bunch of good ones on manga tutorials, and also a list of other tutorials under drawing animation and tutorials on the forums. http://http://www.mangatutorials.com...als-List-v-3-0
    (Here's the link)

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    hi there, i guess i'm a 'new' member too, just like you, to most people here since i've been gone for more than half a year.
    with that aside, i have a few observations on your posts.

    1. You have an idea of volume when it comes to drawing. This can still be improved. Maybe, try to get better references for these poses/scenes (i suppose you used reference)
    2. Face anatomy is good enough however it varies from one drawing to another
    3. There is an attempt to do shading which is a good sign. This can be improved when the volumetrics of your drawing improves.
    4. Good job on persistence! Keep drawing but always try to enjoy the process rather than the product. A piece of advice... don't get frustrated when things don't go the way you imagined... it happens to everyone. It's a phase which everyone goes through. Its a good sign. it means you are growing and learning as an artist.

    Take care yo! keep it up.
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    So I went ahead and keep drawing and drawing. Here are drawings in order of their creation. I'm gonna post couple as photo and as scanned image. Kinda still not sure which one looks better and which one to keep... so anyway, here we go:

    https://dl.dropboxusercontent.com/u/...28photo%29.png
    https://dl.dropboxusercontent.com/u/...scanned%29.png

    https://dl.dropboxusercontent.com/u/...28photo%29.png
    https://dl.dropboxusercontent.com/u/...scanned%29.png

    https://dl.dropboxusercontent.com/u/...28photo%29.png
    https://dl.dropboxusercontent.com/u/...scanned%29.png

    And this one was finished 2-3 hours ago
    https://dl.dropboxusercontent.com/u/...28photo%29.png

    There is also this one I want to redraw. In my opinion - head here is very tiny for such body. It kinda breaks proportions a lot. And gonna try evade sitting poses for like "big" drawings.
    https://dl.dropboxusercontent.com/u/...8%20Sketch.png

    Next week gonna go deeper into human bodies and gestures. Bought this dummy here. Gonna use it too. Come to think of it... yeah. Making same face from drawing to drawing should also be one of short term goals... although overall more or less get the idea of proportions. Hopefully whatever will come out later - will be better. It has to be better ^_^ Otherwise how can I be able to make my tiny manga

    To be honest love drawing a lot so far

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    yo AlexP,

    The shading is getting really good especially in the close up drawings of yuno's head.

    As you noticed yourself are the proportions a bit off in the last drawing. Try to use a reference photo to draw from.
    for example
    http://www.deviantart.com/art/Basic-...se-7-432619384

    Something that helped me to learn proportions is to divide the picture in lines which are one head apart from each other.
    like this (note: in the video are the proportions more toward a comic style then realistic):
    https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=VhNNyoYfP0U

    keep up the practicing, you have made good progress.

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