Hejin Fifty-Seven and his...art?

[Hejin]

This is where I post my art, I guess. Since descriptions and story don't matter as much as skill and drawing expertise, I'm just gonna post it up and see what people have to say. I've had friends look over it and give me opinions, but harsh critique is always the best kind in my opinion. Luckily they're all in pencil and I can fix them at anytime.



EDIT: Fixed the neck width and the size of the right boot. The boot still seems a little big though, so I think I may go back in and fix it again.

















In case you might be wondering, the last four images are a storyboard rough I recently finished for an animated music video I actually plan on starting and finishing in the next two years. Yes, it's not scanned that well, and yes, it's on looseleaf. It's a rough, not a final version. But that's a whole 'nother story in itself. Critique is all I really need right now.

[Rio]

I only looked over your first drawing so the first thing that jumped up at me is the difference in the size of her feet. The right is bigger than her left. Now, if her left leg was positioned so that it goes back a bit, it would be fine as this will involve perspective (i.e. further parts of the body tend to look smaller than those up front) but this doesn't seem to be the case. They're both on the same distance from the viewer.

Also, for a woman to have such a thick neck, she doesn't seem to have the bulk to go with it.

[Hejin]

I never actually noticed that the neck was too thick. Thanks for pointing that out.

The foot was intended to look closer, but I guess it didn't come out as intended and I might as well make it equal size. Thanks.