This does look a lot better! The arms especially!
Okay i'll try that out thanks!
@JJ - Thanks glad I got the arms fixed
Didn't get round to much today so here is an unreferenced male attempt, am I getting any better at all with males?
Female Anatomy Practice #1:
This was unreferenced and I think it went ok
The final female anatomy I got bored and decided to instead of just leaving her blank and went into other details such as the face and stuff i've observed from mangas, below is what i'll be doing to keep my practice up at females whilst I concentrate on Male's and also so I can learn the smaller details and the details under the clothes. I also decided to try an emotion study so expect some new emotional things now and again.
Female Anatomy #2/Emotions Study:
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Male attempt: The head is too big, eyes to anime, the nose is not centered, the hands are small, weird placement of arms, the feets are floating and too much cloth (anatomy means naked, so we can see every section of its body).
First woman: head to big, it doesn't respect the perspective and weird small hands.
Second woman: head too big, weird boob perspective according to the body, the arms are too thin, too anime eyes, very anime expression, try to evade this last one, its bullshit in the way that you as an artist must learn to express character emotions without over reacting their features (cartoon or anime style) or placing extra elements so the people understand, you are not going to develop technique if you use tricks to achieve your goals.
Observations: you tend to draw females characters naked, while males are with cloth, this is weird in many levels, specially because the little naked females hide their vagina, which seems a shame on sexual parts, and even more on male sexual parts. Evade this, learn to love human body in its fullness. Also throw away everything that is anime, you might love the style, you might want to just draw that, but you are just using shortcuts and jumping over important techniques that you might never going to learn (or its going to become really hard), just because you are using a very simplified style that its mean to be for the over constant production of it.
clock, be nice. let him experiment. if he's serious about drawing he will deviate into other things later. for now, be critical but be. nice.
james, clock bluntly pointed out most of the corrections i would have said, but how you want to draw eyes is your choice, 'kay?
the legs on your male seem slightly too big for his body. males normally have more musculare development in the the torso and shoulders, so that area often appears wider than the hips. also, maybe beef up his arms a bit?
argh, i wish i could redline!!!
on your first female, the point of the hip is too low. the shape of the hip goes out at a sharper- not to sharp, mind you- angle (from the waist/ bottom of the ribcage) to the top of the pelvis, then it slants gradually down to the bottom of the butt, which is the widest point and about equal to the bottom of the groin.
her legs on the whole are quite large and the kneecap is too big.
your second female is quite cutesy :3
her boobs are too high up on her chest+uneven. they should sit just above the middle of the ribcage.
the shoulder closest to us should be bigger. standing looking straight at us, that shoulder would be shorter than the one on the other side.
for a request, add some shading to your anatomy next time. it would be a good way to gauge your understanding of how bones and muscular shapes affect the skin and would give your characters a greater sense of volume.
I have done those, this guy knows it as I already gave him a strong amount of advices and critiques (which I'm not going to do again very soon to anyone), but those were just for technical aspects on head proportions, perspectives and so on.
Wow! So many corrections already! That doesn't leave me with much, but there's still something a little off with the second females. Her legs are at a different perspective from the rest of the body, it seems. It looks as if the view of the body is straight one, while the view of the legs is from above. Hope this helps.
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Also, please don't redline unless you're experienced and reaaaaally have proportions down. People inflict their own flaws upon the drawing when redlining, and it really messes up the original artist. I don't even do that shit
i wasn't going to redline the whole drawing, i was only going to correct a specific part in relation to the critique. i have an anatomy book at the ready to reference from when i critique, so i think it would be okay if i tried it once? maybe?
besides i can't redline, i don't have a tablet or any graphics software.
sorry for double posting, clicked the wrong button, was supposed to be editing original post. sorry :s
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