well done! the eyes do look alot better! the shoulder looks like its raised slightly too much as a girl probably wouldn't have that much muscular development on her shoulder. her arm looks good too, and the only thing i can say about her had is that it would look more natural if the thumb was positioned underneath the index finger, as it looks slightly awkward and uncomfortable right now.

i have one comment to make on her face too,though this isn't major and could just be down to the style. her eyes are correctly placed according to perspective, but her nose appears to far back in her face in relation to her eyes. keeping the same position relative to each other, the nose would appear almost flat in profile. hope this helps