Demon's Critique Collection

**JJJorgie** · 07-09-2012, 06:45 PM

Woohoo! Vast Improvement! Keep up the great work! On the newest, move the farthest eye towards the edge on the face a little more. Also, the folds on the breast are really odd and aren't where real folds or creases would be for a tight t-shirt. i think you should erase them and put in some horizontal type folds.

**Demonfyre** · 07-09-2012, 06:51 PM

Thanks

and I will try my best to fix them up and make them look like one with the ice sword

only wish I had known that before I line art and coloured it :L

**WhenRabbitsAttack** · 07-09-2012, 07:09 PM

wow james...... just....wow.

tou've improved so much over 3 months. like HOLY SHIRT,MAN!!!

i don't know much about colouring so i can't say much, but the insides of eternals sleves could be a darker colour that the outside to give a sense of volume

and i've already told you that her boobs aren't quite right, but since it's coloured already, there's not much you can do :/

i love her hair though BD

**Demonfyre** · 07-09-2012, 07:40 PM

Originally Posted by WhenRabbitsAttack

wow james...... just....wow.

tou've improved so much over 3 months. like HOLY SHIRT,MAN!!!

i don't know much about colouring so i can't say much, but the insides of eternals sleves could be a darker colour that the outside to give a sense of volume

and i've already told you that her boobs aren't quite right, but since it's coloured already, there's not much you can do :/

i love her hair though BD

Thanks

and i'll make sure to shade in those sleeves, need to stop forgetting about them :L and i'll try to fix the breasts to the best of my ability

**Demonfyre** · 07-10-2012, 05:50 PM

Leland Fanart

Sorry, my scanner appears to have not copied the skin shading on the legs :/ and he was supposed to be slightly turned away but when I added the clothing it makes it look like he is standing straight towards you :/

**JJJorgie** · 07-10-2012, 06:32 PM

This looks good! I think the feet are a little small and considering where the wrists are, the thighs are a little short.

**Mr_Liebe** · 07-10-2012, 06:36 PM

The thighs are a bit short, and thin. the left (his right) pupil looks a bit lopsided, round it out some. Other than that, it's very nice, keep it up. The shading could indeed be a bit better, but hey, still very nice, you're doing great.

**Demonfyre** · 07-10-2012, 09:06 PM

Originally Posted by JJJorgie

This looks good! I think the feet are a little small and considering where the wrists are, the thighs are a little short.

Thanks for pointing that out to me

I'll make sure to lengthen the thighs a bit and make the feet bigger before I move onto lineart it

Originally Posted by Mr_Liebe

The thighs are a bit short, and thin. the left (his right) pupil looks a bit lopsided, round it out some. Other than that, it's very nice, keep it up. The shading could indeed be a bit better, but hey, still very nice, you're doing great.

Thanks Liebe

i'll see if I can fix that eye tomorrow and yeah the shading is a bit haphazard, doesn't help when the scanner isn't working *gets mad at scanner* :L