Demon's Critique Collection

[Demonfyre]

I thought so just needed clarification... Hmm well I'll post up those new sketches tomorrow and try out some profile views, I obviously need more work on legs :L

[Demonfyre]

Finished the drawings and fixes here is my attempt at fixing the coloured picture:


http://i1165.photobucket.com/albums/...olouredFix.jpg

What I did is I moved the whole leg up a notch so that it was parallel to the line the shoulders made and I think that fixed it too a degree. Didn't bother with the feet though... colouring pencil is a nightmare to rub out :L


http://i1165.photobucket.com/albums/...uredRedraw.jpg

This is the redrawn version to fix the legs and feet I think it was a success but let me know if I did it right this time :L also should move (her) right arm back so its hidden like in the original? I brought it out to try some foreshortening but im not sure it looks natural having it there :/ also sorry for the lack of colour/shading, I will add that in once I've had feedback and no there is nothing needing edited

Oh and also would you mind telling me which one you think is better? Thanks in advance

[JJJorgie]

The feet and legs look a ton better!

You really need to draw the hands bigger! Also, her right (our left) eye needs to be a lot thinner than the other, so we get that 3/4 view effect!

Oh, and her left (our right) arm and shoulder look detached form the body.

[Demonfyre]

Noted I'll fix those up and then shade it etc

I'll place the arm behind the body like in my original so it looks normal, hopefully that should work

[Demonfyre]

http://i1165.photobucket.com/albums/...RedrawnFix.jpg

There is the fixed up version and I shaded it as well as a bonus didn't remove the arm I've grown accustomed to its presence now :L



http://i1165.photobucket.com/albums/...re1/photo1.jpg

Current project im working on and will finish sometime tomorrow I may also post up the reference im using.

[AlmanacnamedTime]

back leg looks a bit long.

[Demonfyre]

Noted I will fix that before I start working on the other hand and face thanks for feedback

[JJJorgie]

The arms still look kind of detached from the body; like they've been dislocated. Also, you may want to make the body (chest, waist, and hips) one smooth line. Overall, good job!

[Demonfyre]

^ Yeah, im trying to work on the look of dislocation I keep creating... im not sure what im doing wrong yet, I'll just keep trying til I get it right I guess

Likewise noted and will fix tomorrow and thanks

[JJJorgie]

Just draw the arm closer to the body.