This isn't a redline. I'm just trying to make my critique clearer by pointing something out.
The line I made is referring to the folds in the sleeve. The bottom one is too long. The top fold makes it look as if the shoulder and arm is detached from the rest of the body. and the slight dip right before the shoulder doesn't help. I don't know if this will help, so tell me if I need to explain it differently. Keep up the good work.