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Last edited by shadow_falling; 05-25-2012 at 12:16 AM.
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Pg4 with a new introduction.
Last edited by shadow_falling; 05-13-2012 at 10:42 PM.
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And Pg5
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2 new, plus I edited a few of the old pages.
Last edited by shadow_falling; 05-13-2012 at 10:46 PM.
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It's pretty good, I think.
The art is good.
However, in my opinion, could be a bit more "sarcastic".
My one question is how can someone be shy and outspoken?
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Another new page. I got a little distracted by Diablo 3, so I didn't get my usual 2 or greater done last week. But on the other hand, I have the sequence of events for the next 30 pages planned out, and since the basic introductions are over, the storyline is going to start picking up some. There will be a mysterious character intro in the next page, and page 10 will have a surprise.
@bijju Yeah, I've been trying to make it a bit more sarcastic but the story is going to pick up very soon, so there will be less humour overall. That's not to say it won't still be there, but some pages might be devoted to advancement of the plot. And yes, I changed the shy and outspoken thing, just haven't updated it. Thanks for the critique.
Last edited by shadow_falling; 05-20-2012 at 06:26 PM.
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Just about to finish off the first ten, and that makes me happy.
Last edited by shadow_falling; 05-25-2012 at 12:18 AM.
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Page number 10. Hopefully the size works out like I want it to.
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Hate to be a bummer, but that new layout is pretty hard to read... Perhaps a nine panel (three rows of three) layout would work out better for you?...
Either way, I've at least been scooting through this. Seems amusing enough even through nothing mega has happened yet. But I guess that'll be after the introductions, like you said.
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Yeah, it's just about to pick up. The page 9 mystery intro is going to be an interesting character. As for the layout, It shows up bigger on sites like Devart, where it is made to be wider, but I guess that isn't going to work here. I'll see what I can work out.
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