My idea for a Shoujo manga; please critique.
Oddly enough, I have never been a fan of Shojo manga. The only Shojo anime I ever watched was Ouran High School Host Club. Anyway I had this idea for a story and I have a few chapters posted on flipnote hatena. (warning: amateur style art)
Anyway, here is an idea of what my story is about. I don't think it is too cliched. If it is, I've never read a story like it.
Genre: romance, comedy, drama
It is almost Valentine's day and the Valentine's Day dance is the biggest event for freshmen at Valentino High (name may be changed). Julia Singleton has always longed for a boyfriend and dreams of finding true love before the big night. However, she has never been attractive to guys. She has never had a boyfriend, been asked on a date, or even given a small friendly note that simply asked "Do you like me? Check yes or no."
Surrounded by couples of all ages (even her ten year old sister has a boyfriend) she begins to doubt that someone as tiny and plain as her could ever find love.
After rejections from every male she meets, she dashes out of the school yard in tears.
On her way home, she accidentally bumps into an odd lady pushing a cart of "lucky" charms. The charms scatter everywhere and Julia began to frantically pick them up. One catches Julia's eye. A love charm, decorated with five sparkling red heats connected to a silver chain. The charm lady tells Julia that the charm she is holding is a special charm; one that will grant her heart's deepest desire. Julia clutches the charm bracelet to her chest and simply wishes that boys will love her.
Yes, that boys will love her. Now every teenage male who touches the charm falls madly in love with Julia.
The cliched school "hottie" that all of the girls dream of dating.
A British foreign exchange student who is gifted in fine arts, and dreams of performing on Broadway.
The genius and unappealing school nerd.
And the school's star athlete, who also happens to be her best friend's boyfriend! (uh-oh!)
At first, one touches the charm and Julia is flattered. Then as more and more touch the charm, Julia becomes overwhelmed with admirers that won't leave her alone! All of these males who once did not know of Julia's existence are now duking it out for her affection. Can Julia find true love amongst these "Charmed" admires, or can she even find true love with so many admires?
Thank you in advance for your critiques. Please be kind and don't say "This idea sucks!" or "It's too cliched."
The characters may seemed cliched, but trust me, their personalities are very unique. I just hope you get to see them.
Last edited by Saiyagal85; 12-31-2011 at 09:50 AM.