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Honestly, with some facial alignment, it'd look really good! You probably already know most of what's off about it. Straighten up the lips, maybe lower the nose and show less nostrils since the view doesn't seem to be from below. The eyebrows shouldn't go so far down. The eye on the left is smaller than the other and there's an awkward bulge of hair on the outside left towards the top of the head.
Thanks! I've taken your advice into serious consideration and have made according adjustments:
Hullo Looking nice looking nice. I think the main issue that I'm noticing, at least with the face, is a lack of volume. JJ already mentioned straightening the lips, but with this look (or at least the look I think you're going for) I think you could push it more with the shading on the face. I'm not really the best person to be giving advice about this, since this is something I'm just trying to figure out, but I think you really need to think about the different shapes that make up the planes on the face and how they would affect the shading.
The places to really focus in on here are the nose, the cheeks, and the chin. In real life they're all rather bulbous shapes, like the nose sticks out from the face and therefore has more shading underneath it. Its really hard to put into words =-= so I'm going to put some examples from deviantart in spoilers. Hopefully this helps... :/
Anyway... This isn't as coherent as I'd like, it's late and i'm tired, but the main thing to really focus on is volume. I've said this lots of times I think, but it bears repeating because the face really isn't flat. Also the hair is looking a bit spiky and stiff... Consider using looser, more flowy strokes for the hair. Even pin-straight hair has a tiny bit of wave to it. I hope this was somewhat helpful? I know it wasn't overly specific... I really like the overall design of the girl, and the armor looks awesome! The shading on the armor is pretty damn fantastic and I can't wait to see how it looks when/if you modify stuff.
Wowee! Thanks so much for the crits, Cora! That was super awesome. :3
Anyways, coloring without lines is turning out to be a big headache for me. @_@
So I decided to just draw cartoony stuff and practice coloring those before I try more realism. I took your advice into consideration, Cora, and I looked up planes of the face as well as using the images you provided for me as a references. Wowzers! It really helped me out a lot! Thank you so much again. :3
I think you should be cell-shading/coloring if you're going to be using lines as dark as that. Right now it looks oddly 2-dimensional.
Bitchin' style though
uwu you are super right my brother those lines are pretty thick huh