Siliva's Artwork, is it?
Getting crit on stuff is good. Alright, so, yeah.
One of the few times you'll see me work with colored pencils. Keeping those jerks sharp is such a pain I typically avoid them if I can. The way my scanner scanned this didn't really help, either...
Because I'm a loser who has absolutely no taste in anime or manga, here's Yu-Gi-Oh fanart.
A rather early attempt at inking with a brush. Ugh. It's the most challenging tool I've used so far. Look at that jacket. Looks like crap. And the girl's shoulders are way too broad. I'm not controlling the brush. The brush is controlling me...
Impressive. I like your pictures. Although I think in the fanart the jacket is floating a bit too much. It's like if he just landed from a fall. As for the colored pencils drawing, I'm not sure, but is his left hand really supposed to look like this? The last drawing... yeah I agree with you - the jacket looks weird, and the girl's shoulders are too broad indeed, and a bit too edgy, but other than that it's GOOD.
You're doing good. Work on what Sekator mentioned. Also, try to clean you lines up a bit, and keep working on proportions. You're off to a good start