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Jingshen
06-13-2011, 01:55 AM
Although My artwork is pretty bad, I am posting here for help on how to make them better so...

Please tell me how I can improve

Sorry if my style is a bit different

New wip with some improvements
http://i306.photobucket.com/albums/nn262/dudin100/Manga/IMG_0001_NEW.jpg

Some guy drawn badly
http://i306.photobucket.com/albums/nn262/dudin100/Manga/IMG-37.jpg

An OC my little sister made up, she wanted me to draw him.
http://i306.photobucket.com/albums/nn262/dudin100/Manga/IMG-38.jpg

Sketch page of faces
http://i306.photobucket.com/albums/nn262/dudin100/Manga/IMG_0002-12.jpg

Guy
http://i306.photobucket.com/albums/nn262/dudin100/Manga/IMG_0002_NEW.jpg

Girl
http://i306.photobucket.com/albums/nn262/dudin100/Manga/IMG_NEW.jpg

Hands
http://i306.photobucket.com/albums/nn262/dudin100/Manga/IMG_0003_NEW.jpg

NWAP
06-13-2011, 11:57 AM
Although My artwork is pretty bad, I am posting here for help on how to make them better so...

Well, you've come to the right place XD. your over all anatomy isn't bad at all my friend. Of course There's a lot of room for improvement. the first thing I noticed is that you draw your mouths waaay too low. This makes them appear to have a small chin, or, no chin at all. keep studying the facial anatomy of your favorite style. secondly, although I saw some wrinkles, most of your clothes seem to be pretty flat looking and plain. Don't be afraid add some wrinkles and details.

Jingshen
06-13-2011, 03:29 PM
OKay, thanks for the advice, actually I am a bit lazy to draw wrinkles which is why I don't, but I will try a bit more

Jingshen
06-14-2011, 09:25 AM
The guy in the middle is drawn with his mouth up higher and more folds

http://i306.photobucket.com/albums/nn262/dudin100/Manga/IMG-36.jpg

Mr_D
06-14-2011, 10:32 AM
I quite like it, tbh. The face is the guy in the middle is great, but the body is a bit less great. In terms of proportions you're doing pretty well and you did a good job on the wrinkles so far. I'm sure that those things will work out better with more pracise.

About the middle guys left arm that's leaning on his leg, it's leaning too much inwards and the hand is oddly placed. Try doing that pose yourself and look in a mirror, you'll see how it works by yourself ^^ The other arm, the one sticking out has little volume. In this perspective, you need to make it more round, basically like a cilinder. We shouldn't be able to see much of his shoulder either, the arm is partially covering it.

About the fingers, every finger makes the same twist, which makes it look weird especially for the upper ones. I doubt I can bend my fingers that way. You can be satisfied with the hand for now, I'd understand, but know it's not like it should be. I'd say take a mirror and compare with your own hand :p it's an easy way to look at the correct shape :D Good luck!

Jingshen
06-16-2011, 09:37 PM
A distraction from my WIP
http://i306.photobucket.com/albums/nn262/dudin100/Manga/IMG-37.jpg

Rio
06-21-2011, 04:02 PM
His right arm looks stockier than his left. Not bad otherwise. C:

Scarletlight
06-22-2011, 04:11 AM
pretty well done. Id advice you work on how you draw legs. Sometimes they look a bit rectangular. But it is just a sketch I guess.

tagYURIT
06-22-2011, 06:26 AM
hey. .ur face renderin is definitely not bad. . but your hand drawing is not very good. .but thats ok. . . it doesn't mean that you should stop drawin'. . .you just need to practice more. .Hey. .I think that you should study more on foreshortening and perspective. . and ur mouth drawing is not that bad. .I think that it resembles that of Katekyo Hitman Reborn's. . .I hope to see your future projects. .^^

Jingshen
06-28-2011, 04:55 AM
Thanks for all the advice everyone!

An OC my little sister made up, she wanted me to draw him.
Please note that there was not a terrible amount of effort put into this, especially his left hand, but overall, I think it turned out well
http://i306.photobucket.com/albums/nn262/dudin100/Manga/IMG-38.jpg

Sketch page of faces, please tell me how I can improve in this area. I just noticed that I used the same eyes for three guys, gotta work on more variety I guess. Look at all the eraser marks! OTL
http://i306.photobucket.com/albums/nn262/dudin100/Manga/IMG_0002-12.jpg

Scarletlight
07-01-2011, 03:56 AM
Yeah technically speaking there all great. Good facial anatomy, good porportions and all that crap that you need. A good job on that. The style is even pretty attractive!
..But your right..you need variance. All your characters look very very similar. Many faces have the same shape, eyes and even hair looking through all your posts. Youv got all the key stuff down well but now youv got that, play with it abit. tweaking the rules a little helps with making different characters.

Theres umm..a thing I saved somewhere that would be perfect for you..umm
Got it!!
http://jeinu.deviantart.com/art/Unique-Features-Tutorial-Pt-3-198515118
There you go, that should help you out with variance.

Jingshen
07-01-2011, 05:57 AM
Yeah, thanks for the link, it will come in handy

ladyannette
07-01-2011, 04:12 PM
My Turn!

You are VERY talented indeed! BUT (And I fail at this too in just my penciling) it could stand to be cleaner. I am very easily distracted, so extra lines tend to make me look everywhere, except at the figure itself. ^^;;

And I also agree with Scarlet, they look like the same dude (*totally clicked the link so she can vary more too*).

GrayFullbuster
07-03-2011, 06:29 AM
Wow. Its so nice. :D
But yeah your hand is not that good. Please don't be offended.
But that's fine to me because we're the same. I'm bad at drawing hands. xD
Just practice. That's what I can tell. :)

Jingshen
08-15-2011, 04:51 PM
Wow it has been about a month since I last put stuff here, whatever, I was busy with other stuff.

Some random girl
http://i306.photobucket.com/albums/nn262/dudin100/Manga/IMG_NEW.jpg

A guy that looks somewhat different from my usual ones
http://i306.photobucket.com/albums/nn262/dudin100/Manga/IMG_0002_NEW.jpg

I fix'd the WIP a little bit, but I really just stopped working on it altogether
http://i306.photobucket.com/albums/nn262/dudin100/Manga/IMG_0001_NEW.jpg

Hand practice, because I really need it
http://i306.photobucket.com/albums/nn262/dudin100/Manga/IMG_0003_NEW.jpg

scanten71-402san
08-20-2011, 07:35 AM
Nice stuff! I love it! You're a kind of person that can draw manga better than me.

trilokcool3
08-20-2011, 10:17 AM
ok tats nice work so far...
i think guys helpe u a lot...but i want 2 say something too..
even if u practiced making those fingers they are still the same....
1>>> thickness of the fingers
2>>> thumb size
3>>> some look like banana shape
4>>> better if u put nails 2 make it mor realistic...
5>>> try making joints in each finger (each finger has 3 joints..)
tats all
try figure out those points...

ram
08-20-2011, 08:19 PM
you still got a lot to go when it comes to side view. head doesn't go slimmer in width when it's in side view. rather it becomes a little wider.
the front view is the slimmest.

also torso isn't wider on the part that's close to us. atleast it doesn't go that wide

Celestial-Fox
08-21-2011, 03:06 AM
Ooh, I don't think I've seen this thread before. I really, really like the way you do hair. I'd watch out for proportion, though. your legs have a tendency to get a little boxy and too long.

Jingshen
08-25-2011, 04:24 AM
Okay thanks for the advice again. I am pretty bad at side view, mostly because I do not use it much. My hands still suck. Also I usually make legs kind of boxy because pants do not take on the shape of the leg usually, but it would not hurt to put in a few more folds. I will soon put up a sketch page of side views later so You guys can tell me what's wrong.

Leannah
09-07-2011, 08:20 PM
Your hands are pretty good!