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kine
04-29-2011, 12:40 AM
http://www.mangatutorials.com/file/pic/photo/2011/04/kine-smoothdraw-3-pic-2-3_500.jpg?t=4dba405bd4229

this i a chibi i drew with smooth draw 3

http://www.mangatutorials.com/file/pic/photo/2011/04/kine-photo0266-001-jpg_500.jpg?t=4dba40abcdb4fhttp://

i know her face i a little weird but besides that

http://www.mangatutorials.com/file/pic/photo/2011/04/kine-photo0257-001-jpg_500.jpg?t=4dba40f0e6a3c

these are some of my recent pics plz critique

http://www.mangatutorials.com/file/pic/photo/2011/05/kine-kazuki-motu_500.jpg?t=4dbdc9215c89d.

new pic that i drew as a request

http://www.mangatutorials.com/file/pic/photo/2011/05/kine-face-practice-drawing_500.jpg?t=4dbde1995e253

http://www.mangatutorials.com/file/pic/photo/2011/06/kine-jt-a-random-dude_500.jpg?t=4e10dbae6699c

got another new one

http://www.mangatutorials.com/file/pic/photo/2011/06/kine-spartan0_500.jpg?t=4e10dbc9ad173

this one i drew a couple years ago

Lady_Knife
04-29-2011, 01:00 AM
quick tip, I know it's difficult especially when ruled paper is readily available but try not to draw on ruled paper. It's distracting and not really good for design/perspective. I draw on ruled paper all the time whenever I want to quickly get an idea down but after that I always draw the full idea on clean paper or clean it up digitally.

kine
04-29-2011, 01:21 AM
ok thx i jt use that cause its wats in my note book. i got a writng tablet so i should be good

NWAP
04-30-2011, 01:32 AM
From what I can see....*squints*....your basic anatomy and proportions are pretty good. I would recommend you focus on facial structure/anatomy. Make sure your eyes, nose, and mouth are centered in proportion to the head. Id like to see more...in a bigger size maybe? keep posting

kine
05-01-2011, 12:01 AM
thx for that (i dont think im good enough to exaggerate the size yet)

Fenn
05-01-2011, 10:48 AM
thx for that (i dont think im good enough to exaggerate the size yet)

I think maybe he ment bigger zoom/image size? I don't know though.

Tip: until you get better with faces and proportions, try not to cover their face with hair. It makes critique easier. At the least, add hair last after the rest of the face is done.

NWAP
05-01-2011, 12:23 PM
I think maybe he ment bigger zoom/image size? I don't know though.

Tip: until you get better with faces and proportions, try not to cover their face with hair. It makes critique easier. At the least, add hair last after the rest of the face is done.

yea..thats what I meant o-o.

kine
05-01-2011, 04:56 PM
lol i thought it was the other thing but i took those with my phone so i couldnt zoom too much and i usually add hair last

ram
06-06-2011, 01:09 PM
yeah it's so hard to see... >.< i know you have a scanner cause i saw your gallery already so why won't you post it scanned?

Scarletlight
06-06-2011, 03:41 PM
I will try my best to critique you with what I can see.
Anatomy
For the girl you drew, you have done well with the general porportion of everything. I would work on the shape of individual things now to improve your work. For example the shoulders on girls tend to be slanted downward such that they look more petite. Also waist to hip ratio is important. The hips should be larger than the waist, for example the hips could come out to the width of the shoulders but the waist tucks in to give a slender figure. Easiesy way to illustrate it is ' the figure should resemble an hourglass' in rough terms.

For the guy, I think you did a good job with the anatomy. Watch the facial shape though, heads tend to have a few more angles in them and arent just the circle and triangle shapes shown in tutorials. Its a good guideline but you need to really flesh out the jawline and similar. I suggest reference to get it looking attractive which is what I often have to do.

On the last picture I think the forehead needs to be bigger because his head seems to come to a sudden stop at the top.


Gesture
Its good to draw straight on shots when you look for critique because it makes it easier to see. I think I would be able to better grasp your skill level and help you if you could show us some side views or other angles/poses as well.

Hair
There are common places where hair grows on most peoples heads. Although everyone is different there are general shapes hair lines follow.
The hair you have drawn in the final image I don't think follows these regular patterns.
Hair tends to come down nearer the ears. Even if there aren't actual bangs down along the ear line, it still tends to taper off to a point near the ears ( like where side burns form ). And try to give it a bit of volume by adding some hear showing behind the head perhaps.


I hope I havn't come across as rude. Just trying to add something constructive. Its good that you always draw the hands too instead of hiding them :).

ram
06-06-2011, 08:50 PM
i think the best way for me to critique this is for you to say what is the best wallpaper and the best reference you have ever seen... cause i don't really know what you would want to make it look like... just tell me what type of drawing style you choose...

Cloudy
06-07-2011, 02:36 AM
Check out all our tutorials on the site and come on the groupboard and watch people draw you can always ask us for help with anything you are having trouble with (located up the top)
I think you should focus on getting the proportions right for the bodies and face, draw from life I know it sounds boring but getting the correct figure and face drawn from real life references will help you so much in the future, make notes in your sketchbook..yes you should definitely buy a sketchbook for drawing in they call it a visual diary.

kine
07-03-2011, 05:18 PM
thx for the critiques adn i would like some more on the newer pics.
@Cloudy-chan i have a skecthbook now
@Scarletlight thx and i dont see anything in your post as rude.

Leannah
09-08-2011, 06:03 PM
I draw on ruled paper too it's no big deal if that's all you have. I haven't bought art supplies yet, not even decent pencils.
I mean if you're that broke or if you haven't got time to go shopping like me you can use ruled paper, especially if it helps you with proportions and stuff (it helps me)
I like your spartan guy :)

kine
12-18-2011, 10:39 AM
I draw on ruled paper too it's no big deal if that's all you have. I haven't bought art supplies yet, not even decent pencils.
I mean if you're that broke or if you haven't got time to go shopping like me you can use ruled paper, especially if it helps you with proportions and stuff (it helps me)
I like your spartan guy :)
Thanks and lol late reply on my part but i have some more pics for you all.(If you click on one and you're like this isn't on MT this is DA and this iisn't Kine's stuff, yes it is on DA I'm LeonG47) This is a pic of Hitsaguya from Bleach. I did it for a fan-art contest.
http://fc08.deviantart.net/fs71/f/2011/264/1/0/hitsaguya_fanart_by_leong47-d4aikbz.jpg

This is a pic of Byakuya from Bleach. It was a request. http://fc03.deviantart.net/fs70/f/2011/295/d/2/kuchiki_byakuya_speed_paint_by_leong47-d4dnqk1.jpg

And this is a pic of my OC Knight. He will be one of the 5 main characters in my manga although he isn't the most main character if that makes sense.http://th06.deviantart.net/fs70/PRE/i/2011/337/2/b/my_oc_knight_by_leong47-d4i3hdd.jpg

This is my part of a collab that me and a friend did although I think its a dead collab.http://fc02.deviantart.net/fs70/f/2011/308/b/e/me_and_guardianangel121_collab_my_part_by_leong47-d4f4l57.jpg

Sunny
12-18-2011, 10:58 AM
The main problem I really see here is your head shape and the hair. Remember that hair is looser. It curves and curls about the subject. Gravity also has an effect.

Try to bring the mouth/eyes/nose closer together. Study measurements; you really have a great start and I hope you improve fast.

Yojimbo
12-18-2011, 11:10 AM
the bottom picture on this set is quite nice but remember faces are more round apposed to boxy, but really good..

kine
12-18-2011, 11:21 AM
@Sunny Ok thanks
@Yojimbo Got it

kine
05-31-2012, 01:56 AM
I don't think this counts as double posting since it's been so long and I'm updating it with more pics but if it is please tell me and I'm sorry. Anyways new art.
No arms or legs since I didn't even attempt to draw them.
http://th08.deviantart.net/fs70/PRE/i/2012/055/d/0/neko_girl_oc___celia_pic_2_colored_by_leong47-d4qvnp2.jpg
This one was done while watching a tutorial from Kienan Lafferty and the tutorial can be found here: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=gYHUlsXnTpc&feature=g-u-u&context=G28f0f3cFUAAAAAAAXAA
http://th05.deviantart.net/fs71/PRE/i/2012/080/5/5/running_girl_by_leong47-d4th22y.jpg
This was a birthday present for Yojimbo or Polarcrow as he's called on here now.
http://th07.deviantart.net/fs70/PRE/f/2012/082/5/f/5f0c826fb2c4b62ceb2ecb2cdb556b5e-d4tpcvw.jpg
This one is a fan art of Chimneyswift11 on youtube. Here's a link to his channel if you want to check him out. http://www.youtube.com/user/ChimneySwift11?feature=g-user-u
http://fc08.deviantart.net/fs71/f/2012/090/f/f/chimneyswift11_fan_art_by_leong47-d4uk9pn.jpg
Here is a Minecraft fan art.
http://th07.deviantart.net/fs71/PRE/f/2012/105/e/b/eb4a2c48cf0c2f8d22bb04344e329975-d4w9mfl.jpg
This one is a second version of a fan art I did for D.A.S. which is made by this guy http://scottisfamous7.deviantart.com/
http://fc07.deviantart.net/fs70/i/2012/150/5/c/d_a_s__fan_art_v2_by_leong47-d51om1y.jpg
I though I'd include this for the lolz. It's the original D.A.S. fan art I did compared to the new one.
http://fc09.deviantart.net/fs70/f/2012/150/4/f/4f5107fd729eebd2d1e1a3e0baa908ed-d51ooot.jpg
All these pictures are on my deviant art not here.

Cloudy
05-31-2012, 03:41 AM
it's awesome to see you trying new things! I see improvement keep it up, watch that hand size it's a little on the small side, but that's ok practice and you will get it :D

kine
05-31-2012, 05:07 AM
it's awesome to see you trying new things! I see improvement keep it up, watch that hand size it's a little on the small side, but that's ok practice and you will get it :D
Thank you and XD I didn't notice the hands being so small till you mentioned it. Thanks again.

Demonfyre
05-31-2012, 07:05 AM
They're looking good :D anatomy is looking good and the colouring is far superior to any colouring I make :P also that Minecraft picture is epic! :3 i'll update this post if I find anything you should fix, haven't found anything yet :).

trilokcool3
05-31-2012, 08:14 AM
Omg !! Kine when did u become a ghost ?!
I mean i couldn't find when you coming to Mt and leaving . Ha ha
well
you improved a lot . Keep on practicing and upload some more.

Regantor
05-31-2012, 10:32 AM
Was meaning to reply in this thread before. The one thing that always catches my eye is the "draw this again meme", really; That's a pretty mega amount of improvement for just one year. ;I

kine
05-31-2012, 02:23 PM
@Demonfyre - Thank you.
@trilokcool3 - I'm WAY more active on my deviant art. There are a good bit of my pics on there that aren't on here. link: http://leong47.deviantart.com/
@Regantor - That's what a lot of people tell me and I'm happy that I've improved so much. It motivates me to draw more and get better.