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faharou-tido
03-25-2011, 05:04 PM
Hi everyone so as the tittle says in this thread i will present my manga amateur.
i will try to upload the evryday page that i a draw.
here is a short resume:

our story bring us to a magical world were there is an floating island that no one have been able to access before. This island hide a mysterious enigma that no one have discover yet, To access to this island it is required to have a talisman which is located in the world. Our young hero named TITIO has a big dream, is to become the first magical hunter to fund the talisman. this is how the journey of our hero is about to start.

Here is a link that contain a version of the chapter 1 that I consider as a one shot. The real chapter 1 will be available on 10 April:
http://www.flickr.com/photos/itchiiworld/5377788008/in/set-72157625880170488/#/photos/itchiiworld/5377788008/in/set-72157625880170488/lightbox/

you could also read the chapter 2 here:
http://www.flickr.com/photos/itchiiworld/5420622007/in/set-72157625987514438/#/photos/itchiiworld/5420622007/in/set-72157625987514438/lightbox/

i hope you will really enjoy reading it. see you ^_^

ps: sorry for the english mistake english its not my first language but i try my best

faharou-tido
03-26-2011, 07:06 PM
here are the first 2 pages that i made for the chapter 1.

http://i52.tinypic.com/2j10ayt.jpg

http://i51.tinypic.com/2ldu7f9.png

Bacon_Barbarian
03-26-2011, 10:32 PM
Well, you're certainly very blunt w/ your intro.

Also, in the 2nd panel (the 1st w/ dialouge), the dialouge could use some work. You end the first 2 sentances with "now" which becomes rendundant and doesn't read well. Also his shoulder slopes up in a way where we should see that the gap that is his armpit.

Is Englush your first language? Because "Me too I want to follow you" is horrible grammar, and I know horrible grammar. Young to leave the dynasty should be "too young" ... There are more but those are the ones that stand out.

faharou-tido
03-26-2011, 10:51 PM
thank you for your comment. to answer your question, i am not english and english it's not my first language.

faharou-tido
07-23-2011, 03:40 AM
hi!! i have been really busy with my study and working on my manga . i finally fiinished my chapter one ( i will do some quick correction) and upload it online for everyone who would like to read it. here is a preview.


http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Jvlk-UnpqvA&feature=channel_video_title