View Full Version : Cap'n Slurp's Art Thread: Yes, I am Alive, unlike this thread.
12-02-2010, 03:04 PM
http://eternalslurp.deviantart.com/#/d342ljcYes something original for once, I kid you not 8D
I gotta try and come on MT more often. And my scanner broke too... :( It scans, but I change the options and it doesn't work!
12-13-2010, 03:11 PM
Practice for a Gothic Lolita contest.
12-14-2010, 03:24 AM
Ahh, yes. SAI is by far the easiest software to create lineart in. I prefer Illustrator though, harder to learn but it gives you more options once you've learned the basics.
Both the card master and the lolita girl is clean and neat. The card master is also a very hard pose to draw *good job*. However, they seem a little bit stiff. This is where basic anatomy training takes you, time to take the next step on the path of the artist =) :
Just as I did you've probably read a ton of tutorials. Many of those tutorials probably encouraged you to use basic geometric shapes to envision what you draw; spheres, cylinders, cubes and so on. Now it's time to reflect deeper on how those shapes interact with each other to make the figure "flow".
One way to practice this is to use photos and other ppls drawings and draw a redline of how you would use the geometric shapes to describe it. When done, hide the original picture and draw your lineart based on the shapes you drew before.
Whoa, just realized that I sound like a whole bunch of philosofs, hope you can make something out of this jibberish anyway :P
12-17-2010, 12:46 PM
NO, that was very helpful! :D It's like I'm halfway there with my drawings, I can feel I'm improving lately and every bit of critiscim helps! Thanks! Also I colored that lolita pic. http://eternalslurp.deviantart.com/#/d351yk2
02-05-2011, 06:04 PM
I think my old thread got lost or deleted because I didn't update it enough or anything. So I'll try to come on more often.
I'm quite worried about this picture, because I don't know digital colouring very well...
Your old thread hasn't been deleted. It just got pushed back all the way to the last page. C:
Anyways, it's not bad for a first time coloring. You should really consider where your light source is coming from before you add in the shading. Right now, it just seems kind of random. Also, some of the shading felt like it was done rather fast - some parts where not shaded in when it should've been shaded in like at the hair.
As for your other artwork, you should watch your lines. Try to go for a seamless line when you ink. If you can, try to clean up your artwork too because I'm seeing a lot of marks that could have been erased.
02-24-2011, 04:16 PM
I've started coloring. So here's my work so far.http://fc04.deviantart.net/fs70/f/2011/055/d/3/work_in_progress_by_eternalslurp-d3ab04x.png
02-25-2011, 10:35 AM
You've got some lovely hair there, and the earing is c u t e. Still, something in this nose seems wrong to me.
Try making your shades darker. You know, not like "greyer" of the color you've chosen, but still.. dont be afraid of contrast. :P Though it might be just my laptop monitor changin the colours and I suppose this is simply the beginning of the process so not much could be said.
02-25-2011, 02:47 PM
Yeah I'm afriad of darker colours. I want her hair to be black but I'm not so sure to go about it. Like I know the base coulour shouldn't be the full on color black... something like that =S
02-25-2011, 02:53 PM
face ur fear
Like I know the base coulour shouldn't be the full on color black... something like that =SIf you know it, then do it. It's not so bad. Use layers, put in shade and put in highlights. That's pretty much it but before that, I would suggest you clean your lines.
Regarding your poll question, start working on both. When I forced myself to go through defined steps of learning drawing, I got bored and felt hopeless. Practice whatever you like and whenever you like.. learning art is so flexible and easy; it's not like Math which requires going through the steps in order.
Go Go Go ~~
02-25-2011, 07:51 PM
:o she is now blond lol But that will most likely change. NOW WITH ADDED WEABOO BACKGROUND.http://fc08.deviantart.net/fs70/f/2011/056/8/9/work_in_progress_by_eternalslurp-d3ab04x.png
02-26-2011, 06:43 PM
SOOOO GOOOOD!!! Yay you use pS5 too right YAY! I dunno why im happy but more on topic! I could only sugest one thing that will make the pic better cuz i love the coouring so far i think that if your wipe that lower part of her nose it would look better...just sayin.
02-27-2011, 11:54 AM
OK, I'll fix the nose since so many have pointed it out >_> ( i kinda thought it was weird too)
04-05-2011, 01:19 PM
Huh. This was a quick coloring I did. Nothing that serious, but I sort of like it. I just couldn't think of a background.
The lineart was about 1-2 hours but I forget how long the rest took too. She's a charachter concept for some upcoming webcomic I'm still planning.
Make her 5-6 heads tall. Preferably 5 or 5 and a half, since she's a loli-ish character. I know you said it wasn't a serious pic, so I'm not gonna elaborate too much. The concept is nice, though I should ask why there's an opening in her top when that would just make her more vulnerable to attacks--especially if she's the type that's gonna be fighting. I'm not saying to not include ecchi/fanservice, but leaving an opening in that spot is a bad idea. Well, then again, so is fighting in a bikini, but that doesn't stop most fantasy artists. Ah well. You can ignore my advice on that; after all, I assume the character is loli and not moe*.
*Just in case you don't know: loli = sexual, moe = non-sexual. But some people just say loli to cover moe as well because it just sounds better.
04-05-2011, 08:22 PM
Fighting in bikinis. You just gave me another idea.
This is gonna be fun! :)
I didn't have that idea at first, but now that you said it, I have another idea as well; I'm willing to bet it's very similar to your idea.
04-06-2011, 05:08 PM
Just tell me what it is! I'd love to hear it :D
04-16-2011, 03:02 PM
Another WIP. I really wish I could finish things...:monkey_angry:
04-16-2011, 04:57 PM
I likes it! Seems like it's going to be very very gothic....
I wish I had a tablet..... ;_;
04-16-2011, 05:10 PM
I got mine on amazon for only around 50 to 60 USD. It is a small size tablet and gets the job done. Look around, you can find one that works well at a good price.
I found some un-inked manga pages from the manga prunus girl and inked them. Could someone explain toning for me? I'm kinda scared to try it out.http://eternalslurp.deviantart.com/art/Manga-Page-Ink-Practice-205149004
Also, could someone please help with the perspective on this sketch? http://eternalslurp.deviantart.com/art/Sketch-for-ryed-contest-205152938
04-16-2011, 07:27 PM
I found one on amazon for 30 that's 7x7in. I just don't have any money to get it and my "parents" won't.
And I'm no good with perspective. >< sorry.
04-18-2011, 06:29 AM
NICE!!! O.O Love the face and the tears......well doesn't that sound Sadistic. Also i think that GunZet could give you some value tutorials that i THINK he has somewhere.
04-18-2011, 08:14 PM
derp. update two. being stuck at home is actually forcing me to do work. who needs school anyway?
I'm sorta almost there. I'm just not sure about my coloring skills. It's not like I'm cell shading more like I'm.. doing something :monkey_what:
04-19-2011, 01:26 PM
Looking good so far. But I'd say at this point worry about where your shadows and highlights are going to be. Like, block in some mid-values.
05-01-2011, 04:56 PM
I got copic markers. I find these waaay easier than Photoshop. They cost a lot though. I drew this Munchlax cardboard thing to keep the ink from seeping through. These markers are adictive!http://fc07.deviantart.net/fs70/f/2011/121/7/3/i_haz_copics_by_eternalslurp-d3fcssh.jpg
05-14-2011, 08:02 AM
I made an animation. Just some simple practice.http://fc04.deviantart.net/fs71/f/2011/133/c/b/the_ball_by_eternalslurp-d3g9s0d.gif
05-15-2011, 03:53 PM
Another one. :D They said to make an intro for your animations so I made this. Animation is alot easier than I thought.http://fc03.deviantart.net/fs70/f/2011/135/1/3/slurpee_intro_by_eternalslurp-d3gf48c.gif
05-16-2011, 06:04 AM
If you use visual basic it's even easier.
05-16-2011, 03:55 PM
Is visual basic an animation program?
Visual Basic is a programming software that uses BASIC as it's base programming language. It's more friendly to non-programmers as it's interface is all GUI-based. It's not specifically used for animation but you can definitely string together some images in it and output an animation.
05-19-2011, 09:01 PM
Hey, Slurp! It's been a really long time since I've had the chance to stop by here. You've been progressing a lot! :O I think what's holding you back the most in terms of coloring are your choices in hue. The color you pick for skin tends to be a little too yellowy/saturated, and I think that your shadows should incorporate more blue tones. Also, don't be afraid to do deep shadows, especially with your new Copic work! It'll really give your great lineart the pop it deserves. :)
06-13-2011, 06:13 PM
Thanks for advice Ceefy! I've been getting that from alot of people- that I should try darker colors. Sadly my copics have been stolen and I am saving up for a new set(this one shall never leave the house)
I did some stuff recently.
I didn't really find this line art that difficult to color though, I found it on devart.
06-13-2011, 11:43 PM
have you tried to see this in saturated mode? the highlighting is off.
if you place a black layer turn saturation mode on for the layer you should be
able to see you picture in black and white to understand the shading better.
all you have to do to turn it back is to turn viability off.
also becareful about the paint bucket because those rough edges kills the picture
06-14-2011, 03:26 PM
I never though of changing the modes to check the shading! thanks for the great tip! :)
06-17-2011, 02:53 PM
colors @o@......XoX............-OoO- <--- these were supposed to be glasses.
07-26-2011, 12:43 PM
Ok so more on animation, I've started making one that will be about maybe 2 mins long. I'm looking for some music but whatever...
here is the screenshot. I need to fix some stuff but this is a work in progress.
08-02-2011, 06:53 PM
random stuff yay
test animation (http://eternalslurp.deviantart.com/#/d4229dw)
and more WIP. some guy commisioned me for like 10 different pics. this is the first. insane O_o
I really would like some help on hands though.. (redline plz?)
=_= well you seem to ignore my advice about don't make the neck too far to the back.
08-02-2011, 07:47 PM
Sorry, I am bad with digital editing, so I cannot redline, but I think I can tell you two ways on how to fix the picture. Frankly, the suggestions may be a bit too drastic for your tastes. You can try them or ignore them as you please.
-The first suggestion has the assumption that the guy holding the girl is a chibi or child. If so, the fingers are too long compared to the hand. You would have to make them much stubbier, resulting in you having to redesign or omit the ring. The second suggestion for the same picture, which assumes he is older, would require you to elongate the proportions of the boy's torso and arm. If you were trying to show that the arm is foreshortened to justify that it is longer, it is still possible to do so without much erasing. However, with the earring portrayed in front of the arm, the arm doesn't appear to be reaching out as you would want.
-Ramiel is also right with all three pictures; the neck juts out a bit too much.
08-02-2011, 09:44 PM
the neck juts out a bit too much. im going 2 say its way too much and is super creepy looking.. fix this problem asap plz the pictures would be way better
08-02-2011, 11:50 PM
I was trying to be subtle about it, but yeah, fixing the neck would seriously improve the pic.
08-03-2011, 01:26 PM
Sorry I have a really bad habit with necks. I'll fix it right away
yeah i seen your past post and you seem to do those necks correct somehow.
=_= my guess is you ask help for reference too much.
edit: sorry not all of those arts, maybe just one or two has the correct position of neck.
08-04-2011, 01:57 PM
I ask for it because I spent a good hour trying to draw one hand >_>
Today I will practice drawing necks :)
More sketches for that guys halloween requesthttp://forum.ntreev.net/pangya/resized-image.ashx/__size/550x0/__key/CommunityServer.Discussions.Components.Files/11/1263.progress2.png
very nice slurpee.. i really like it.
though you should take consideration of the connecting the body. your good at body and anatomy and head but your not that good at connecting them.
i'm kinda busy with some other stuffs so sorry i can't make red line. so i'll just show you the correct head placement of where it should be placed.
08-04-2011, 04:52 PM
Although you gotta admit Rams its way better then the other pics.
yeah i really agree. that's the best art i seen you did so far. specially your adding background which i got bored trying to master though why is the background bottom view? shouldn't it be top view?
08-06-2011, 07:28 PM
someone commisioned me for an animated signature, but I scrapped the first sketch. The colors don't feel right.
holy ******! that's really awesome! darn i gotta learn animation!
08-11-2011, 10:51 PM
I'll fix the hair in the morning. :l I never finish stuff... but I WILL FINISH YOU!!
08-12-2011, 04:01 PM
Her rib-cage looks really... off.. like the front of it that comes down from the breasts is sticking out too much.. try drawing the skeletal structure for the rib cage and hip bone (not too complex, just basic shapes you know)...
slurpee I'd really like to know what type of guideline you use.
08-12-2011, 09:29 PM
I would like to know too lol.
I recently bought a book on perspective, so, things will get better 8D
Also I am redoing the ribcage. I should just redo the whole picture actually :l
08-13-2011, 12:06 AM
The animation is super awesome, what did you use to make it?
As for the next picture, I agree with ego on the ribcage and skeletal structures. I strooongly suggest working on using guidelines, both for anatomy and faces/heads! You can look at which guidelines work for you (circles, lines, circles and lines, various shapes, etc etc) and practice with those. They are the most helpful thing one can use, besides references, and they'll structure your anatomy much better than just free drawing it.
Everything looks quite off keeping perspective in mind. Since it seems like the camera is angled from above, her chest should be much more inwards, shoulders higher to help with the perspective illusion (possibly to where you can't see the neck), the bottom half of the legs should be more under the thighs, and also sort of become smaller.
Also, remember to keep in mind that hair is typically really flowy and goes with gravity! lol. Since your character seems to be flying upwards, the hair should be pushed back and flying away from the head.
The arm should also be a bit longer, and also remember elbows and arm creases!
If you want to work on building perspective and stuff, you should totally just draw straight cities and landscapes without characters and post them here. It'd be cool to see how you work on them and what techniques you use to learn <:
that's good to know. just hope that book you bought has good info.
you used a vanishing point but didn't follow it at all.
the right placement of vanishing point should be one on the left, one on the right and one on the bottom, since that is obviously should be 3 point perspective..
what's the name of the book you bought?
08-13-2011, 10:43 AM
Yeah, I'll start on the perspective. For animation I simply used photoshop. I made the layers in SAI and just saved it as .PSD and it was just easy from there on :)
I thought it was 2 point perspective. Seems I still have quite a way to go. The book I got was Vanishing Point:Perspective for Comics from the Ground Up by Jason Cheeseman-Meyer
This animation isn't finished either but I still uploaded it.
And my habit of never finishing continues 8D
nice! that book looks good... bit it's so expensive that it's cost more than half of my tablet.
never really bought a book.. just got my hands on the book rio said in the how to practice thread. <strike>without paying ofcourse</strike>
rolf.. I think why you don't finish work is because you can see your mistakes.. which is a good thing.
you should go to the gb. with seeing people draw and continue it even though they took hours and hours will probably motivate you to keep going with your drawing as well.
just a suggestion
08-19-2011, 07:56 PM
So I redid that picture from that guys commision to include more characters. He wanted practically 20 characters. Although I am really starting to love the challenge. Still not done with the tower though.http://fc04.deviantart.net/fs70/f/2011/232/e/d/wip_4_by_eternalslurp-d475y9d.png
NICE! lol we use the same guide line, didn't think there were people like me who use circle for whole head as well.. atleast here in mt.
where did you learn that type of guideline?
08-21-2011, 03:07 AM
That clock looks great! And jeeze, TWENTY? You are so veteran. XD
08-21-2011, 10:35 PM
I learnt most of my guidelines from random how to draw manga books at the library and from MT. That explains why I know nothing about anatomy lol
Not twenty in one picture. that would be insane. the clock tower is based off of big ben. Gonna erase some parts and some magic looks effects on it :)
08-26-2011, 06:56 PM
update on pictures and stuff. I signed up to gaia and got some more commisions. these guys are good practice for me!
very nice slurp! keep it up!
I really like to see the finished drawing!
08-28-2011, 05:21 AM
In the first pic i think that either the shoulder should be more up, or that she should have a plastic surgery considering how big of her jaw is xD sorry, but really i think that the jaw shouldn't be so big.
in poses you should consider thinking of doll parts in drawing bodies, it makes you good at thinking stuffs in 3d.
don't really know how long before my tutorial get approved by rio, but i guess it won't hurt to give you a sneak peak.
well the tutorial is just about a process of how i did my saimoe character.
08-28-2011, 11:56 AM
Yeah, her should is funny, But i can't figure out how to place it really =/
We do our sketches exactly the same! XD
09-03-2011, 07:04 PM
I'm having quite a bit of trouble with creating a pose for someone's commsion. Should I come up with a better pose or what? The legs are what's getting to me .
09-04-2011, 12:43 AM
I think the pose itself is fine. With that level of foreshortening the torso-stomach section should be a lot shorter (the eye level currently looks like you're looking from the top, then at the stomach, then from the top again once you reach the legs) so I imagine it'll look fine if you resized things a bit. You have the option of changing the view to an extreme top-down one or one from the front.
Edit: Mary Jane pose for leg reference
Flip it around yourself :P
09-04-2011, 01:04 AM
Was that done by bakanekonei Hamachi? :D
09-05-2011, 04:28 AM
Hama: OH. LOL. MARY JANE. XD Just click this, okay? (http://belgianbollocks.tumblr.com/post/9703065865/holdontoyourassbutts-turntechlongbottom) Hahahaha.
And hmm, this one is kinda difficult for me to crit. I guess before I start, I have to ask you what kind of proportion set are you looking at? Are you trying to do a figure 5 heads high, or is the perspective just troubling for you?
09-05-2011, 12:01 PM
Lol Ceefy, LOL XD
The perspective is whats troubling. And Like when I draw I keep feeling like the torso is off :l
09-07-2011, 05:10 PM
I LOVE YOUR CLOCK AND YOUR GIRL!
However, the girl below the clock and the landscape looks way weird because her face is way too large. She is also missing an ear. :p
It's fine though because your collab drawing is going to be awesome!
09-09-2011, 11:25 AM
I never noticed she was missing an ear , lol. Thanks for pointing that out! XD
09-09-2011, 01:56 PM
i need a new shop sign for my online little request shops. here is the first of many. I want something to attract them.. maybe it should be "flashy" instead of "cute"
09-18-2011, 04:40 PM
school's got me busy so i'm starting to regret taking up requests. afraid i can't balance them all... i am finishing them though. redid appsis request.
still neck probs >_>,
makes me wonder if you accept any criticism.
09-20-2011, 02:56 PM
Sorry. Habits are hard to break. I'll fix it!
09-20-2011, 03:10 PM
Your coloring is pretty good, but the body shapes really offset it at times. I'd suggest picking up some anatomy practice and really stick with it for while. It's boring, but I guarantee it'll pay off and make your art look 10x better.
Right now your anatomy isn't HORRID, it's pretty good, but I know you've been around here for a while. And I'd really like to see that massive improvement boost I know you're capable of O_o.
So you know...like I tell everyone lol, keep at it, and make sure to double-triple-multi check everyting.
09-20-2011, 05:50 PM
You have varying perspectives, and the neck is twisted like an owl's on the middle girl. I couldn't find problems with side girls.
09-20-2011, 06:49 PM
Thanks GunZet. I know I'm so close to another Artist Breakthrough! Just.. anatomy is so boring. I need to find a book on the basics, but something sort of intermediate and througough? Any suggestions?
And Don't worry I fixed the neck too. Gotta fix those boobs too lol.
10-01-2011, 04:07 PM
I write too sometimes on the side.
I'm such a creeper writing this stuff, lol
10-01-2011, 05:28 PM
try this http://www.amazon.com/Big-Eyes-Small-Mouth-Role-Playing/dp/096824310X
10-04-2011, 06:54 PM
Is that like a board game or something?
10-04-2011, 08:29 PM
It's a roleplay. You make your own characters and keep track of hit points and such. Kinda like DnD or a RPG video game (only you do all the story writing, enemies, etc.) I used to do something similar (nerd.)
the side still looks wrong and so is the 3/4. LOOK CAREFULLY OF WHAT YOU POSTED AND WHAT YOU DRAW!
also don't combine the hair and head, hair should be thicker than the actual bald head.
10-05-2011, 07:34 PM
just a quick blue-line. Do things according to your own style. Mine isn't perfect.
10-08-2011, 09:39 PM
Thanks for pointing out the obvious mistakes. I'm going to buy a compact mirror to see them easier. Although it might be kinda wierd for a dude to carry one so... >_>
On the bright side I sold this picture for six bucks. Succcckerrr.
10-09-2011, 04:21 AM
Watch out for making the head too big! The shoulders are at different heights on the body, even if one is raised. Things are anatomically cramped. If you look closely, the entire torso is only one head tall, which is very jarring. The feet are very square-like, so maybe you could round those out?
But this also has a lot of other good things going for it. I lik the detail of the head in the treasure chest. The bone structure of that chair is a neat idea, too. The skull on top of the barrel give is a lot of attitude, and I think if might be my favorite part, haha. :)
10-10-2011, 03:20 AM
Careful with the head sizes. To make it believable I'd aim for 6-8 heads high for the whole figure.
Also with the jaw line, when drawing girls I wouldn't define it completely. Leave some of it to the imagination, it will make the face look softer.
Try to leave a little space for the chin as well because that seems to be missing from this.
The pose looks really natural, a real good job there.
One final note, the leg thats bent is much longer than the straight one, careful on that.
Thats all, nice work :)
10-30-2011, 12:03 PM
I actually forgot about this thread for a while. *cough*
Made In China (http://eternalslurp.deviantart.com/gallery/#/d4c8p37)
10-30-2011, 03:41 PM
Torso short and thickand neck angle awkward (on ming ling)on the dragon the mouth is at a strange angle(though if he was chewing it would make sense). To help on the name:Chinese names are also ordinarily 3 syllables. The first is the Surname, and the second two are comprised of the hopes of the parents. For example, a girl may be named xiao mei, or small beautiful.
10-30-2011, 09:10 PM
Slurp. Visit Gb
For that latest picture, I agree with Captain_Neko. The torso is usually 4 heads long, and she looks to be about only 2. If you put your elbows by your side, they would be aligned with your hips; So keep that in mind when your draw Full Body pictures.
Also the head and neck are off, I drew a redline to show you: Made in Taiwan (http://img401.imageshack.us/img401/4640/newcanvaswy.jpg)
In am un-helpful.
11-01-2011, 05:00 PM
OMG YES I SEE IT NOW.
Lol I like the Made in Taiwan thing lol..
11-01-2011, 08:02 PM
To clarify my poll answer, I did not fully agree with half of my option (option #4), but I fully disagreed with the others. I do not think you should work on inking or coloring, but rather drawing in general: blocking in your shapes, defining building blocks, forms and what have you. That's what I do, over and over, and it has and does serve me well.
11-02-2011, 05:18 PM
Thanks. I'm still trying to figure out how to get the poll changed though. I don't want to make a new thread.
11-02-2011, 06:18 PM
Sure! I want to see many Slurpee sketches! >:O
11-03-2011, 07:26 PM
So I've decided to hunker down and force myself to finish at least one anatomy picture per day and a perspective picture per week. School getting in the way these days =.=
11-03-2011, 07:52 PM
Argh! The dreaded school! Fuck it all, half-ass everything, make Cs, draw like a boos, go to Community College, transfer to University!
Edit: Neck is always in the middle of the whole head,
They only look far on the back because neck is not really straight in reality.
Though it's quite obvious that your not aiming for reality type of style so It's best to follow my advice.
11-05-2011, 12:40 PM
Thanks very helpful. I asked my friends and they said I also put my eyes too low. Is that true?
11-05-2011, 05:20 PM
Yeah just raise the face up a bit maybe unless you really like it low @w@
Thanks very helpful. I asked my friends and they said I also put my eyes too low. Is that true?
I think the head is just far too high, I mean all the stuffs above her eyes are far too high.
11-06-2011, 04:38 PM
I'd agree with what Sylux reasoned out about the poll so I didn't took a vote
Also with what ram said, the position of the eyes with regards to the proportions for the body you drew along with it doesn't make the eyes look too low. It's the top of her head (eyebrows and upwards) that gives the impression. The size of it makes her face look small. The indication of her hairline at an acceptable level though...I don't know if I'm right to interpret this as her hair having thick volume because your other works are pretty much okay with with that issue.
I also looked through the other images. They generally don't give me the impression that you used guidelines to draw them. I suggest you post you pictures with the guidelines intact so we could evaluate how you use them and fix the areas that cause problems. :)
11-08-2011, 03:40 PM
Yeah this is how I draw heads and bodies in general.
11-16-2011, 06:17 AM
11-17-2011, 12:08 AM
You've improved a LOT. Wow! I noticed, though, that your shoulder widths tend to be about the same witch as the head. Have you tried considering making them even just about a half head wider? I think it would make your bodies appear more solid.
11-21-2011, 01:19 PM
I would like to point out that your last pic is cute and fun (since I will only be critiquing on that one) however the legs don't seem to be perportionate to each other and her right arm is set too high. Checking on myself, despite being a guy and not having man boobies, I would say that the arm extends a quarter ways down the breast, rathe than it being on top of it, as you drew it. As well, breasts are more of an urn shape than a balloon shape, which is to say that the top of the breasts aren't detailed with a line like you have, unless they are compressed to the body. Yours seem a little too round to be the later, so I would erase the top curve on her right brest and rather curve it out slightly as an s shape... but not so defined at the top... kinda like a curved b shape... wish I had my computer to show you...
Also your eyes and nose are a bit too high. the side of the face is a good indecator to eye placement. you have a nice shape of the head, which will help with this comment: The concaved part on the left side of the head is placed between the forhead and the cheek as an eye socket is concaved into the skull. Thus your eyes should be alined with that, rather than being higher than that. this will also bring the nose down. The part of the head that pulls the right side back out is your cheek (just a random fact)
I hope this was coherant and will edit if it wasn't
11-21-2011, 04:00 PM
Those eyes are too high.
Thanks for your in depth report Maxx!
12-03-2011, 05:10 PM
eyes coloring practice (http://eternalslurp.deviantart.com/art/coloring-practice-272203949)
now all i need to learn is backgrounds.:cat_whyyou:
12-03-2011, 07:09 PM
Pretty nice coloring, a bit too simple if you ask me, but still fine. I would only mention that the shadows don't add up on the arm and the hand.
12-03-2011, 07:12 PM
Nice eyes practice @_@
12-19-2011, 07:24 PM
Didnt color the eys this time. I feel like I should use stronger colors on the shading for this one. abuse of the blur tool i guess.
12-19-2011, 09:05 PM
I really like it! Her right fingers seem like they need to be a bit longer, though. And her left arm needs a little more definition; the wrist is pretty skinny. The pose is great!
12-21-2011, 06:01 PM
uhm, to clarify i just colored it. xD
12-30-2011, 03:59 PM
work in progress. cant decide between the hair. but the real challenge will be the background. next picture will be a pokemon emerald montage animation or a picture compilation.
12-31-2011, 09:24 PM
WOW! Nice one Slurp! Really like it! The head is in its place :D also the sweater is really good! I have a miner animosity to SD drawings but i do like this one!
12-31-2011, 09:31 PM
Wait, are you doing this in Flash?
12-31-2011, 09:48 PM
^if she is........hot damn.......how the hell?
01-01-2012, 12:08 AM
Wait, are you doing this in Flash?
He means the PKMN thing. I'm doing it in photoshop. I don't know anything about Flash honestly.
01-01-2012, 12:16 AM
Oh are you using a line tool? :?
01-01-2012, 12:25 AM
Yes? How could i not?
01-01-2012, 12:35 AM
No I mean you lay down a pencil line then use manipulators to get the shape you want
01-01-2012, 12:28 PM
Uh yes, I am.
01-01-2012, 12:33 PM
Oh okay I wasn't aware Photoshop had one :)
01-02-2012, 08:08 AM
Uh, ok now I'm just confused. What are you talking about??
01-02-2012, 08:16 AM
The pencil tool (http://help.adobe.com/en_US/illustrator/cs/using/WS4CCAA516-C476-4cd9-B36A-DB88AD124DBA.html) with the anchors and whatnot
01-02-2012, 11:39 AM
ppft who uses that? XD
01-02-2012, 11:42 AM
...professional animators... >_>
01-03-2012, 01:10 AM
the pen tool works nice and clean BUT in my experience is makes things look kinda flat and lifeless but im sure if you spent enough time using it, it could look nice.
01-03-2012, 05:50 PM
Today I learnt the difference between vector and bitmap images in design class. Which gets me thinking: should I do lineart in vector, or coloring in vector. Do you guys know any vector based programs?
01-06-2012, 12:10 PM
Illustrator is a huge vector based program, but I wouldn't recommend it for the art you're working on. I mean, vector is cool and all, and I know that Cpt. Sparky does it, but I think that you might prefer sticking with whatever you're using now. Don't let me change what you want to do. Try it for yourself and see how it works for you. You never know if it will help.
01-06-2012, 07:42 PM
Who is Capt. Sparky?
01-07-2012, 05:55 AM
You know him as sparkyj I think
01-07-2012, 03:49 PM
This is Sparky's thread (http://www.mangatutorials.com/forum/showthread.php?182-OFWGKTA). C: He uses Illustrator, which, like the others said, is a vector-based drawing/design program. Vector lines can be blown up to any size that you want with 0% quality loss. That's right. Many artists do choose to use Flash for their lineart because it gives that crisp, high-quality line (one that's so sharp that it's almost jagged-looking in small dimensions, like you see in Sparky's thread). However, vector coloring is a pain in the butt, so most artists take their vector lineart, export it into a raster (which is synonymous with bitmap, essentially) format, then color it in a raster program, such as Photoshop, Painter, Mangastudio, etc. Vector coloring is just extremely stiff and not very organic unless you are an absolute pro. Even then, it's just a better use of tools to do raster coloring, anyway. I mean, even vector lines aren't essential, unless you're trying to make prints the size of huge poster/bilboards. I've made prints that are three feet long and the coloring was still crisp. Granted, I don't use lineart, so it's easier to get away with. It's your choice, though. (:
But anyway! With your last picture I agree with Ged that I'm not the most savvy on SD anatomy, but I really like your interpretation of it a lot. It kinda makes me want to try it. I like her expression and the colors that you're using so far.
01-14-2012, 08:27 PM
I saw his thread. That guy is all kinds of awesome.
Also, I thought I would post my script thing for the MangaMakingMonth on Mangatutorials. If ya dont know what it is, you should totally join here. (http://www.mangatutorials.com/forum/showthread.php?1786-Manga-Making-Month-(MaMo)-2012!)
Here's the script I'm working on so far. Tell me what I can do so far SixthSense Script (http://eternalslurp.deviantart.com/art/Sixth-Sense-Oneshot-Script-278040796)
Also, i came up with some character concept sketches. Which do ya think is best for the main characters hair color?
01-15-2012, 05:25 PM
I really like the one on the right because there is more color depth to it. The other ones seem a little flat. :) Still good, though.
01-21-2012, 04:17 PM
Started a thread to rip off nerd's videogames money by drawing their characters. <3
Latale Fanart Thread. (http://nforum.ogplanet.com/latale/forum_posts.asp?TID=348226)
01-21-2012, 04:35 PM
I like the one in the middle by colour association. The white hair seems to say he's a airy fairy, head in the colouds, weak sort of person; whereas the purple makes me think he looks evil, specificly an evil wizard of some kind. Green is the colour of plants, growth and life so I'd choose that one.
01-28-2012, 08:56 AM
Check it out. I'm actually halfway done finishing a picture WITH A BACKGROUND.
01-28-2012, 09:47 AM
I'm not sure if it is intentional or not but I noticed a lot of your characters have very large heads and short bodies.But they don't really seem like your regular chibi
In the last one her legs seem very long in comparison to her upper body.
I think the faces are very cute.
If you are going for that chibi look then usually the body is 3 heads high and very small, yours are around 3 1/2 with long legs. I guess it's a stylised chibi?
Anyway Id'e like to see more :3
01-28-2012, 12:13 PM
Yes, I know a lot of people have asked If I'm drawing chibis.. which worries me. I ussually try to make it 5-6 heads tall but I guess I should try 6-7 now.
01-28-2012, 09:38 PM
It's because the head is enormous in comparison to the body just scale it down a bit
02-11-2012, 05:24 PM
More Online Fanart. Busy practicing maybe I'll post some stuff of that later.
Ani Orclair (http://eternalslurp.deviantart.com/art/Ani-Orclair-284197017)
02-11-2012, 05:27 PM
man, why don't you come on GB as much as you used to..
Its more fun with more people... and i don't want to be alone with cype anymore *twitches from PTSD*
02-12-2012, 01:38 PM
I was on yesterday, but a storm cut of my internet service until just right now!
02-12-2012, 06:33 PM
Heey check it out Group board pic i did :Dhttp://fc06.deviantart.net/fs71/f/2012/043/e/4/fun_on_gb_by_eternalslurp-d4pizzi.png
02-13-2012, 03:24 PM
Now that is good! THe head is ON the neck! Now as for the violin i think they put it between the chin and the collar bone. But still its much better then before.
02-13-2012, 04:44 PM
Yup, i finally kicked my bad neck habit thanks to ramiel! :D
02-13-2012, 08:27 PM
Way to kick that neck problem! One thing I see is that the foot pointing away from us is small.
09-03-2012, 07:38 PM
Its been forever since ive drawn anything. Hell I only filled out ONE sketchbook this summer.
But im trying to get back into my mojo.
No. 52 Elegant Vampire
From MA's 100 theme challenge!
Can you guess how many roses there are?
IN the begging this was going to be like, a maid. But then it just turned into something else...
I even thought up a little story of the picture.
~~Licorice, the wandering vampire who lusts after the blood of rich barons, posing as a maid to infiltrate their mansions....~~
09-03-2012, 07:41 PM
First of all; how many pages in one sketchbook? :P
On her face I think you could make the side slope more, since it's a straight forward pose it just looks a little odd with the side almost vertical. I also think the lower left arm is a bit thin, other than that I think it's great!
09-03-2012, 07:43 PM
Around 30 pages. Not like actual full pictures but just sketches.. which is just so weird for me.
02-17-2014, 11:36 AM
Okay so the last time I posted in here was a year ago jesuz whoa.
I should post pictures more often, I miss MT ;_ ;
Good people, and only place to get a good critique.
Okay, I want an honest critque of this pic
02-17-2014, 11:57 AM
The far eye is slightly taller than the one on the right. The far eye should be narrower, since it's at a 3/4 view. The mouth and nose are a little low and the nose should be slight moved to the left (so it's aligned with the chin). The wings just look like bags. Angel wings follow similiar anatomy to those of actual bird wings. Here's a link to a good wing walk-through: here (http://jjjorgie.tumblr.com/search/wings)
On a positive note, she's very cute and has a good face shape :)
04-28-2014, 03:38 PM
I'm trying to correct this sketch before I ink it. Can I get some advice please, or maybe even a red line.
And Yes I know her leg does this thing. I keep notes on a back page to know what to fix when I go back to a picture.
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