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08-09-2012, 10:13 PM
SEE NEWEST POST.
Prince of Angels
08-10-2012, 08:34 PM
Not sure if I'm supposed to say anything here, but I'll offer up some help for the Prologue or whatever that top paragraph is. Grammaratical Error #1: But when the royal bloodline is wiped out, the Grim Reaper takes hold of the kingdom, and spreads his dark reign arcoss the lands.
PoA Suggests: But when the royal bloodline is wiped out, the Grim Reaper took controll of the kingdom, and spread his dark reign across the lands. And that's really all I could find. :3 Hope to be of help and sorry if I wasn't supposed to post here...
08-10-2012, 08:45 PM
Critique is welcome, but warning, the first chapter is very long.
Thanks for the small crits :D
Prince of Angels
08-10-2012, 09:13 PM
Oh... I thought that meant for the chapters. :3
08-10-2012, 09:53 PM
Nah, it's alright. People can do either one.
03-26-2013, 05:20 PM
Pretty much a major update; I rewrote them both and started working on another novel as well. I also renamed the two.
Constructive critique is graciously accepted.
(Formerly The Lost Prophecy.)
Chapter One (http://www.wattpad.com/7627886-the-rising-chapter-one-the-edge-of-oblivion)
Chapter Two (http://www.wattpad.com/8224579-the-rising-chapter-two-first-encounter)
Chapter Three (http://www.wattpad.com/8437545-the-rising-chapter-three-the-outer-rim)
Prologue Part One (http://www.wattpad.com/8429578-malevolence-prologue-escape-part-one)
Prologue Part Two (http://www.wattpad.com/10692699-malevolence-prologue-escape-part-two)
(NO, IT ISN'T A RIP OFF OF MAXIMUM RIDE.)
Chapter One (http://www.wattpad.com/9686534-project-angel-chapter-one-rebel-girl)
I'll stop updating my old threads now.
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