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Regantor
01-09-2011, 05:31 PM
http://www.deviantart.com/download/186072243/voidborn_title_card_by_regantor-d32s69f.jpg

-Voidborn has a smackjeeves site here (http://voidborn.smackjeeves.com/archive/), yo. :o-

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Hey again guys. The pet project lives on. Figured I'd move it to the new forum for convience.

As always comments, harsh critique, or even just speculation are mega appreaciated. :3

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It's the far future. The human race has grown, spread through the stars, then become a boogeyman story for aliens to scare their naughty children with. Mastering influx travel and smashing planets with ease, the human-decended "Voidborn" live entirely in space, jealously protecting the last pockets of the human race from natural extintion by annihilating every alien species in their way.

Much to their chargin, not all humans agree with this policy, however. The pocket carrier "Diamondback", and it's newly formed replacement crew, is sent to irradicate this crime of thought before it spreads too far into their own ranks...

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Bacon_Barbarian
01-09-2011, 06:51 PM
LOL Figurehead as a Title. :P

It's nice to have all 15 pages in the first post. Is this on the place where Obsolete was too?

*Needs more pages before he can comment on the plot*

In the last panel of the lates page, it doesn't look like his mouth is pen, but that he has really big lips. Also the people who are soluting have odd costumes. They appear to be baggy (due to the folds), but if they are in fact baggy, then these people are insanely skinny.

Kodos
01-09-2011, 07:09 PM
Fuck year!

Regantor
01-09-2011, 08:19 PM
LOL Figurehead as a Title. :P

It's nice to have all 15 pages in the first post. Is this on the place where Obsolete was too?

*Needs more pages before he can comment on the plot*

In the last panel of the lates page, it doesn't look like his mouth is pen, but that he has really big lips. Also the people who are soluting have odd costumes. They appear to be baggy (due to the folds), but if they are in fact baggy, then these people are insanely skinny.

Voidborn citizens automatically have the captian's chair, but little actual power. Thus, Figurehead. :P

Been meaning to upload this to smackjeeves, yeah, but haven't gotten around to it yet. >_>

Plotty plottness will be comming in hordes very soon, no worries... Also, yeah his mouth is a bit FUBAR looking at it... As for skinny people, Odan (the guy) is supposed to be a skinny-ass fairy boy from space, but Eletha isn't. Thanks for pointing it out, this I'll have to fix... >_>


Fuck year!

Screw decade! >:u... :3

MINI UPDATE;

For great justice, VB now has a smackjeeves (http://voidborn.smackjeeves.com/archive/) site.

Evil_Cake
01-12-2011, 01:55 AM
is there a monument 1-3?

Regantor
01-12-2011, 02:59 PM
There's a monument 1-11. :p

Evil_Cake
01-12-2011, 04:35 PM
o wow

Ryousukethehappy
01-16-2011, 04:12 PM
Woah!!! this is good i tried making a manga about space fights it was just that i didnt have good ideas for ship designs.....
kinda reminds me of homeworld and sins heh

keep up the good work

Ryousukethehappy
01-16-2011, 04:13 PM
HMMMM...now were have i seen that character from?!?

Celestial-Fox
01-16-2011, 07:19 PM
This new guy. Ohmahgawsh. Might be a favorite characte rI'm sensing. XD

Regantor
01-16-2011, 09:31 PM
@Sean Long; Thanks man! -And yeah, ship designs are difficult. The best advice I can give is to consider the overall shape of the ship before breaking it up into little bits with detail...

Also, if you mean the guy in the russian hat... He was my avatar for years, lul. How long you been lurking MT?... If you mean from somewhere else, I really hope he isn't too similar. x_x

@C-Fox; Again, talking about russian hat guy? "Gharl" appreciates this if so. :3

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Double also, new pages!... with terrible toning. But yeah, I have to save some stamina. Might come back to these later...

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Added into first page post for convienence, too.

Bacon_Barbarian
01-17-2011, 01:38 PM
Ooooh. Getting to some Crunch now are we? (Not that the cheese wasn't delicious.)

Kodos
01-17-2011, 03:43 PM
Minor bitching because I'm an English Nazi: Enhanced, not Inhanced.

Otherwise, awesome stuff, Regfish. I love the facial expressions

Regantor
01-17-2011, 04:36 PM
@ Bacon; You betcha. It may be page 19 already, but these characters WILL actually get names soon... x_x

@ Kodos; Fixed. Much appreciation for the critique and the comment Kodosguy. :3

Regantor
01-21-2011, 12:43 PM
Just working on a new version of the 1st chapter cover. Dunno if I like it. What do you guys think? :m

http://www.freewebs.com/handcannon/REG11VBChimeraIIIWIP4.jpg

Kodos
01-21-2011, 01:03 PM
Awesome face, awesome boobs, awesome everything. @_@ Kodos heartily approves.

Evil_Cake
01-21-2011, 06:15 PM
hmm so far I like it more

with the current one it is hard to tell whats going on except for the face

Regantor
01-21-2011, 11:02 PM
Alright. Thanks for the imput, guys... :3

I agree that the first one was way too dark, and was just sorta an acended concept sketch anyway. If I can fix her chin a bit more I'll probally potatoshop this one and use it.

More pages soonish, too. ;I

CypressDahlia
01-22-2011, 12:26 AM
Good stuff there. Really nice cover.

Evil_Cake
01-22-2011, 01:11 PM
btw on page 18's last panel.. I think some extra line weight on Ranst would help him stick out more and make the panel way good

PWhit
01-22-2011, 01:43 PM
Very well done on the art. The cover is one of my favorite parts. I want to see more of it more to get more into the story since it takes a lot of read through to get what's going on in the first couple pages. I might add that Figurehead looks almost exactly like someone from Evangellion so just be careful to avoid plagiarism accusations.

Other than that tidbit, I look forward to the rest of the project.

Regantor
01-22-2011, 03:51 PM
@ Cypress; Thanks. Really wanted it to be more apt for the series. :3

@ Cake; Hum. I can see your point. I'll have a go at fixing it when I come back to change the things Bacon mentioned earlier. >_>

@ PWhit; Cheers! Reg prides himself on tedious details. Plot-wise I'm treading very carefully trying not to make this chapter either too confusing or boring... As for Ranst... Yeah, he has alot of Gendou in his appearance. Personality and motivation wise he's completely differant, through, so I'm hoping I can just about sneak by. :P

PWhit
01-22-2011, 11:04 PM
Ah, I know how you feel. Usually the first chapter is the hardest. Trust me, I torn entire manga comics up over such a thing and is still my greatest enemy when I try to make my own. Keep up the good work.

Nyarlathotep
01-23-2011, 02:43 AM
Nice cover page, good pages... very happy to see the story taking shape =)

Rio
01-25-2011, 11:16 PM
Nice stuff Reg! Overall, I like the feel for your manga. Nitpicks:

1. For the beginning pages, there were a lot of panels without sfx which I think would've benefited the reader to help understand what's happening in each panel. Without it, it took me a bit longer to process from one to another. Also, without the sfx...

2. It was kind of weird to the suddenly have a panel where the character talks. It was like watching a silent film and then have sound then turn silent again and basically loop until later into the story. It was just weird.

3. You should make the outline of a character more dense. It's not good when you can't separate the characters from the background. Also,

4. When that girl gets beamed into the ship (I believe that's what happened), you should put white around her so she stand out from such a dark background. It's a common trick when you want viewers to focus on something or separate individuals or groups of people. Just add a white halo around the person, group or thing and it allows readers to focus on it.

What software are you using to add text, btw?

Regantor
01-26-2011, 11:11 AM
Thanks for the support guys. I know I've been pretty slow lately, so it means alot. :3

As for Rio's comments...

1 & 2; This actually came up on the last version of the forum. The lack of sound effects is intentional because empty space litterally doesn't carry sound, but I do agree that it makes things kinda hard to grasp in places. The verdict is still out on this one I'm afraid...

3; I'll try this, thanks. Definately one of my biggest problems with all the grey around, so any suggestions are mega helpful. :3

4; Actually, she just jumps from ship to ship. High tech, low life and all that... Guess an stronger aura would help, through, cheers. The next version will get this.

Photoshop 6 is what I've been using to add both the text and toning.

Rio
01-26-2011, 08:43 PM
Photoshop 6 is what I've been using to add both the text and toning.Ok, then the text editing tutorial I'm planning on doing will most likely help you out. I'll be doing one soon... maybe it'll even be up tonight.

Regantor
02-08-2011, 04:49 PM
@ Rio; I'll be sure to have a decent gander once it's actually uploaded... I did check. >_>

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Gwaaa, these took waaaaay~ too long... And the pacing sucks... But whatever. At least all the characters are set up now. -_-

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Bacon_Barbarian
02-08-2011, 06:58 PM
That kid is UGLY. Also, uhmmm. Oh yeah. Odan made me chuckle. Cause of the Norse mythology, and I'm an odd child who laughs at dumb stuff. Carry on. I have no idea what 6 is doing in the last pannel of PG 21 though.

Kodos
02-08-2011, 07:18 PM
It's Ulow!
In spaaaaaaace!

Kodos approves. This thread is grade A heresy and will free us all from slavery to the False Emperor.

Regantor
02-08-2011, 07:52 PM
That kid is UGLY.

Ult is basically just Reg farting on the fact that every female main character in any media is either a barbie doll or cannon fodder... The result is a schoolgirl bully plus Data from star trek. :3


I have no idea what 6 is doing in the last pannel of PG 21 though.

Her name is "Chimera" as Ranst suggested... and she's tormenting that robotic soupcase thing that got knocked over on page 19. :p


It's Ulow!
In spaaaaaaace!

Kodos approves. This thread is grade A heresy and will free us all from slavery to the False Emperor.

I won't lie, it's definately there, lol... And thanks! Hopefully the chaos gods will help me cure the two cyborgs from their rather serious cases of HEADTUBES. ;I

Harvester_Of_Sorrow
02-08-2011, 10:02 PM
Holy fuck, Reg...Your art has improved 10 fold. Loving it. Not a huge fan of sci-fi comics, but this looks good. I'll keep reading.

Nice!

Regantor
02-09-2011, 01:16 PM
Thanks man. Good to see you're around here now, too...

And yeah. Really been going crazy trying to get stuff spot-on. As for it's Sci-fi-ness, been trying to keep it pretty grimdark and gritty to be fair. The plot points are gonna start getting alot more grey area when you realise that those bugs from the start were just defending one of their own planets, too. :p

Nyarlathotep
02-09-2011, 07:17 PM
Good stuff, Reg =) Quite a diverse array of characters... looking forward to more!

Regantor
02-12-2011, 07:38 AM
Thanks man. The last 4-6 pages of this chapter will be up quite soon, along with a bunch of fixes.

I have to ask, through, since it's taken a while to get things running; What do people think of the overall plot? Do people actually like these characters? What about things like pacing?... >_>

Outcast
02-13-2011, 12:35 PM
It needs to have something happen first although I do like the characters so far.

Evil_Cake
02-13-2011, 12:58 PM
Although the plot hasn't really started to take off yet... I'm guessing it will have something to do with those giant space crustaceans... the characters are cool so far.

Nyarlathotep
02-14-2011, 02:20 AM
Yep, no problem with pacing or characters here. Carry on, sir.

Regantor
02-14-2011, 11:11 AM
Hum. Mega cheers for the imput guys. I am aware that things are moving pretty damn slow at the moment, but it is sorta neccisary to get certain things out of the way hastily... Nice to know that people actually like the characters, anyway.

As for the overall plot, the crabs will appear again but aren't exactly major villans or anything. I can tell you straight out that there are no good or evil races here. The Voidborn themselves aren't exactly innocent, either. :p

Regantor
02-24-2011, 04:48 PM
Retroactively added a new page 14. It's in the right order in the first post. :o

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Also, FTWdogs, plot began occuring. :u

Evil_Cake
02-24-2011, 06:55 PM
oic

Kodos
02-24-2011, 07:16 PM
Awww yeah, more Voidborn up in this bitch.

And, what's this? A wild Plot appeared!

Fight PkMn
Item Run

Nyarlathotep
02-28-2011, 04:30 AM
Mm, plot... delicious.

Great dialogue!

Reset
02-28-2011, 09:02 AM
I hope there is lot of space war!

Regantor
02-28-2011, 01:32 PM
Hey guys. Thanks for the snippy comments. Still working on this, but having computer trouble at the moment. -_-

Eh. Keeping having random ideas for other plots, too, but in the end I'm going to force myself to just dissolve them into this one so I can actually get things done. The new chapter will start sooner or later, after I decide which one of two ideas to use; Either one explaining the space roaches a bit better, or one involving a giant abandoned mining ship with (differant) sinister goings on...

At any rate, more shootyness. ;I

Evil_Cake
03-02-2011, 12:36 AM
what are the pros and cons of both the plot ideas

Bacon_Barbarian
03-08-2011, 11:38 AM
Let your ideas simmer in your brain until they all melt into one big pot of tasty stew... Oh, and plot, very shiny.

Celestial-Fox
03-09-2011, 03:58 AM
I do rather hate how I'll disappear for chunks of time and miss out on VoidBorn, but there's also that added little bonus of coming back and getting to catch up on it and look at it for longer. :'D!! Page 14 is just too cool.

Regantor
03-09-2011, 08:01 PM
Meowp. Thanks for the nice comments, guys. It's a great confidence booster. *_*

Honestly through, right now I'm working on a little something-something differant for a while. VB is kinda backbreaking at times and I thought I'd try something new... Don't wanna jinx it, anyway. So eh. New material soonish. :m

Sconethief
03-17-2011, 02:42 AM
This voidborn is all well and good.....
BUT CROW PIZZA
That is all.

Evil_Cake
03-17-2011, 02:57 AM
haha do u have crowpizza uploaded somewhere

Regantor
03-17-2011, 12:32 PM
I never bothered getting rid of it... *_*

http://www.freewebs.com/handcannon/REGCPANIBANNER1ROTATE2.gif (http://crowpizza.smackjeeves.com/archive/)