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canime4ever
12-15-2011, 10:33 PM
:cat_hi: Hey I've been drawing in many different styles lately and I can't decide what I like best :cat_nyaa: Plus I feel like I'm kinda off on my anatomy... Help?

I know there's something wrong with the bottom one, I just can't put my finger on it...
http://art1.server01.sheezyart.com/image/246/2460905.jpg

The bottom most one bothers me too...
http://art2.server01.sheezyart.com/image/246/2460904.jpg

Anatomy practice for girls of different ages.
http://art2.server01.sheezyart.com/image/246/2460906.jpg

And the rest are my latest CG's
http://www.mangatutorials.com/file/pic/photo/2011/11/canime4ever-baby-warren_500.jpg?t=4eeabb341fd08

I know, the hand looks all weird :cat_teardrop:
http://www.mangatutorials.com/file/pic/photo/2011/12/canime4ever-my-oc-katie-kathy-3_500.jpg?t=4eeabb35edc8d

Thanks in advance~ :cat_shylove:

***EDIT***
I think I found a new style, also sorry for the crappy quality in advance
http://art1.server01.sheezyart.com/image/246/2465324.jpg

I'm going to draw another character and post it tomorrow :3

Nara
12-15-2011, 10:55 PM
What interests me most is the last picture.
I've been trying to draw curls all these times but still can't make a good detailed one.

...and is that a pig doll?
Did you draw it yourself or just putting it there?

About a critique, i think i'm in no position myself to give one because of my circumstances...
You could visit my thread (http://www.mangatutorials.com/forum/showthread.php?1734-Nara-s-Manga-Style-Art-Looking-for-Critiques-amp-Comments!) if you want to know the reason.

canime4ever
12-15-2011, 11:03 PM
Pig doll, no, it was supposed to be a bunny ^_^; but i made it too dark to really see some details (And I think I went and erased a lot of the line art on it) As for the curls, I'd be happy to make a tutorial or something :-)

Maxx_Wellington
12-16-2011, 02:10 AM
your art is awesome. however I do agree with bunny girl's hand... it does look wierd. Also how the girl is holding the bunny shoes that the bunny will fall. When holding an animal, you need to have one hand on the bottom, like a baby, cause it gives support from falling

here's a pic that I hope helps (it's harder to find than I though)

http://www.google.ca/imgres?q=girl+holding+a+small+bunny&um=1&hl=en&biw=1024&bih=506&tbm=isch&tbnid=-O1lUaaSiviw1M:&imgrefurl=http://www.visualphotos.com/image/2x3589746/a_young_girl_holding_a_pet_rabbit_close-up&docid=lhHt7hS1okbMDM&imgurl=http://www.visualphotos.com/photo/2x3589746/a_young_girl_holding_a_pet_rabbit_close-up_lv0060001b.jpg&w=566&h=586&ei=d-7qTsH6IoX20gHiqODRCQ&zoom=1&iact=hc&vpx=760&vpy=135&dur=882&hovh=228&hovw=221&tx=152&ty=156&sig=112807584472686865372&page=1&tbnh=143&tbnw=138&start=0&ndsp=11&ved=1t:429,r:4,s:0

Nara
12-18-2011, 05:10 AM
Pig doll, no, it was supposed to be a bunny ^_^; but i made it too dark to really see some details (And I think I went and erased a lot of the line art on it) As for the curls, I'd be happy to make a tutorial or something :-)

Oh, my bad then... but the bunny really looks like a 3D art.

About tutorial; thanks, that would be so much appreciated though someone already gave me one.
So i think i'll pass, unless you already made it which is i have the obligation to accept it.

canime4ever
02-05-2012, 09:53 PM
I swear I've been drawing A WHOLE FRIGGIN' LOT! I'm gonna wait until I get my scanner though and do a massive art dump... XD Here's something I just finished a few hours ago... http://art1.server01.sheezyart.com/image/246/2468389.jpg

CypressDahlia
02-05-2012, 10:38 PM
Nintendo. Good job. The perspective on the controller is nice, though I think your characters are a little skewed to the left.

Mr_Liebe
02-06-2012, 06:38 PM
Wow, very nice work, I think I could learn a good deal from your art, especially from your body work. You draw hands pretty good, as well.

canime4ever
02-15-2012, 11:56 PM
:cat_umm: I haven't died, I've just been waiting for my stupid scanner to get here (still hasn't, I just used my uncle's which is "forbidden") :cat_secret:

Anywho... I recently took up a new style; C&C please? :cat_pweeese:


*NOTE: I didn't come up with it on my own; most of the stuff I'm going to post in this post I got from pics I've found on the interwebs and I tried mimicking them, now I can draw in that style without ref :cat_noways:



This one I did without ref, but it's still not quite done it, I gotta add the graffiti and figgin' TONE DOWN those lines on the wall! Way too dark. XD

http://www.mangatutorials.com/file/pic/photo/2012/02/canime4ever-art-trade-3.jpg?t=4f3c881fa4872

This one I kinda used ref for the head in the corner 'cuz that's how I'm going to draw older-than-teenager-age charas (male anyways) >3<

http://www.mangatutorials.com/file/pic/photo/2012/02/canime4ever-male-anatomy-practice.jpg?t=4f3c87ec22b8e

And then these are the pics I used ref's with...



http://www.mangatutorials.com/file/pic/photo/2012/02/canime4ever-sumi-redrawn.jpg?t=4f3c87cfe9499

http://www.mangatutorials.com/file/pic/photo/2012/02/canime4ever-new-style-girl-2-3.jpg?t=4f3c87eb3cdc0

http://www.mangatutorials.com/file/pic/photo/2012/02/canime4ever-little-girl-3.jpg?t=4f3c87eb014c3

http://www.mangatutorials.com/file/pic/photo/2012/02/canime4ever-new-style-guy.jpg?t=4f3c87e9894e6


Thank you in advance~ :cat_shylove:

mop
02-17-2012, 12:09 AM
It would take a real master to critique your work to be honest. Most of this looks like it's straight out of an anime. The only real thing you have left to do in order to make it all perfect is shading, I guess. The clothing in the last one, I can tell you were trying to make it all loose fitting and too large for the person who's wearing it, but looks really bulky and sloppy. The only thing about that is though, is that I can't tell if it would still look that way after shading. Oh and the one where you said you used it as reference for the head in the corner, it may just be me, but it seems like maybe the legs on the character standing there might be just a liiiittle bit too short. The anatomy on everything else looks fine, that certain one just caught my eye though.

Honestly though, why don't you just start writing a Manga right now? You've got the skill to go for it.

canime4ever
02-17-2012, 09:37 PM
You're too kind~ :cat_embaressed: I see what you mean about the bagginess on his clothes, but I think you might be confusing part of the scarf with the jacket, and I completely agree with you with his legs being on the shorter side :monkey_ehheh: I ran out of room on the paper :monkey_actcool:

M-me?? Do a manga? :cat_pfft: Actually I'm still in the process of refining the story I'm currently working on... I haven't drawn a single page, but what I've noticed with A LOT of online manga-ka's is that they have a good idea and they do like 50 pages and then stop completely because they haven't planned out the rest of the story, and I don't wanna do that. :cat_sad: Not only that, but I've never tried shading/toning much before, I've never really tried paneling, and I'm still pretty bad at backgrounds... :cat_nyaa: I've been practicing a lot though! And I KNOW I will start it by summer, so that way I won't have to worry about school or anything :cat_thumbsup:

Thank you for taking the time to C&C!~ :cat_shylove:

canime4ever
02-19-2012, 09:07 PM
Hey everyone, I have a question!

Which of these do you think would be best for toning a manga page? :cat_huh:



With little dots?

http://www.mangatutorials.com/file/pic/photo/2012/02/canime4ever-grey-2.jpg?t=4f41a25688bc0

With even smaller dots...

http://www.mangatutorials.com/file/pic/photo/2012/02/canime4ever-grey-1.jpg?t=4f41a24b65acc

With slight cross-hatching.

http://www.mangatutorials.com/file/pic/photo/2012/02/canime4ever-grey-5.jpg?t=4f41a24e06aeb

Only with toning...

http://www.mangatutorials.com/file/pic/photo/2012/02/canime4ever-grey-4.jpg?t=4f41a24e85a1e

Or a mix? (This one's different because I did it last night.)

http://www.mangatutorials.com/file/pic/photo/2012/02/canime4ever-grey-3.jpg?t=4f41a9c7802a8

Or if you don't like any of these, please post an image of what you do like! :cat_payup:


Thank you~ :cat_see:

Im_not_random
02-20-2012, 06:09 AM
My totally unprofessional opinion - they're all good, but I think the mix used the last one really made the textures on her clothing more 'real'. So id say that was the best ( again, in my totally amateurish unprofessional opinion.)

canime4ever
02-20-2012, 11:53 AM
Unprofessional? I don't think so. Any opinion is great! I like that one too because it was easier to do than the others XD Thank you for your opinion~

AlmanacnamedTime
02-20-2012, 12:14 PM
just do different ones at different times! your an artist, yuo can do wtf you want.

canime4ever
02-20-2012, 01:16 PM
But that's so inconsistent! I like having a bit of unity, but I guess you're right in a sense.

AlmanacnamedTime
02-20-2012, 01:45 PM
by different times, i mean different manga

corastaur
02-20-2012, 01:52 PM
I gotta admit I don't really like the last one. It might just be the background throwing me off, but the whole image feels very busy. I like the other ones a lot better, they give off a soft feel. Also the image feels more cohesive with one type of toning. To me it's easier on the eyes :)

canime4ever
02-20-2012, 03:06 PM
@AlmanacnamedTime That makes more sense lol

@corastaur I was also thinking of doing only line art with only a little shading too. I see what you mean about how much it contrasts.

canime4ever
02-23-2012, 05:54 PM
I did a sketch last night and inked it during school today. This is my first time drawing in this perspective, other than the shorts, is there something else I could improve on?

http://th08.deviantart.net/fs70/PRE/i/2012/054/5/4/zephyr_sketch_by_canime4ever-d4qqhlv.jpg

Gedeon
02-29-2012, 01:09 PM
Its.....pretty darn good! The only thing "I" would do is that i'd enlarge the hand just a little bit more. So that it is seen clearly that its in the air above him. The shorts are ok but i think you should have med them.....well more appropriated for the perspective. If someone is watching some oval shaped ....shapes... from that perspective he wouldn't see so much of those lower ....urm laces? All im saying the lower part of the shorts would be less visible. Awesome work Canime.

canime4ever
02-29-2012, 07:16 PM
Yeah I'm fixing that up in PS ^u^; Thanks Ged~! NOTE TAKEN!

canime4ever
03-01-2012, 12:07 AM
This is a doodle I did in school and inked it when I got home, and I know there's a few obvious mistakes like the feathers, the scarf, some folds, his shoe, the leg closest to us, his wings/feathers, etc... I'll probably fix it up on Sai when I feel like it. Other than what I've already pointed out, is there anything that I missed?

http://www.mangatutorials.com/file/pic/photo/2012/03/canime4ever-zephyr-3.jpg?t=4f4f032022764

Tales-Of-Aerion
03-01-2012, 12:56 AM
Ok...:monkey_sweaty: I need to start taking notes from your work ,Because these are really good drawings!:monkey_wow:
but no, other than the errors you pointed out I didnt see any others:monkey_lessee: (probably because I'm not even close to that level yet:monkey_dammit:)

canime4ever
03-01-2012, 07:38 PM
:cat_shy: Thank you~ You're on your way man! I started drawing when I was about your age (1-2 years ago) And look where I am now :cat_yeahright: There's still TONS I have to improve on, but I'll keep steadily moving on and as long as you keep practicing you can too~ ! :3

canime4ever
03-03-2012, 12:59 AM
My first attempt at using Sai exclusively XD

Aside from the lack of shine on the eye, is there anything I could improve/work on?

http://th01.deviantart.net/fs70/PRE/i/2012/062/5/0/1st_attempt__sai_by_canime4ever-d4rn0vy.jpg

Rubisko
03-03-2012, 01:43 AM
Lookin good, but you should be careful with how and where you put gloss. I've never seen a pair of baggy pants that is glossy before. The leather gloves and the hair could be glossy, but they wouldn't give it of by circles of white. Rule of thumbs: circular highlight=>spherical objects, extreme value highlight=>very shiny material

I also realize just now that the leg has two joints.

Other than that; really good work!

Cloudy
03-03-2012, 03:16 AM
nice detail and colouring :D

canime4ever
03-03-2012, 11:33 AM
@Rubisko -- I was just trying something new that I picked up from here > http://curryuku.deviantart.com/art/Tutorial-Coloring-Hair-260071007?q=boost%3Apopular%20((tutorial)%20AND%20 (by%3Acurryuku))&qo=1 (http://curryuku.deviantart.com/art/Tutorial-Coloring-Hair-260071007?q=boost&#37;3Apopular%20((tutorial)%20AND%20 (by%3Acurryuku))&qo=1) I found it useful, but I agree with you about the shine/gloss. I was just experimenting, trying to find a way that I like. :3

@Cloudy -- Thank you~ :D

canime4ever
04-09-2012, 12:28 AM
Ahhh.... Long time no post, eh? Hahaha.... Anywho, here's some sketches that I've done recently :3

Somethings that I drew this morning... http://fc06.deviantart.net/fs70/i/2012/099/4/b/sketch_requests_uploaded_by_canime4ever-d4vku0g.jpg

The first two I drew today and the rest I drew maybe two weeks ago?http://th04.deviantart.net/fs71/PRE/i/2012/099/6/1/character_sketches_xd_by_canime4ever-d4vmq2w.jpg

Any input would be fantastic~! :D

Gedeon
04-11-2012, 10:07 AM
The 1 in the second pic and the 2 in the first pic....i love 'em Also this might be just me but it seems to me that in some of your drawings the legs are shorter then they should be. Just look out for it next time.....pretty awesome. :D

canime4ever
04-11-2012, 08:08 PM
Hey-o~! Got another pic for you guys to C&C
Just practicing my chibi style and playing with textures~If ya wanna check out the contest that I'm entering these guys in, here ya go :D http://crlyxx.deviantart.com/journal/Contest-Time-293736502http://fc00.deviantart.net/fs70/i/2012/102/a/0/crlyxx__s_contest_entries__p_by_canime4ever-d4vy6h0.jpg

Sylux
04-11-2012, 09:47 PM
Super cute!

corastaur
04-11-2012, 10:42 PM
They are so adorable! I love the checkered scarf and the striped hat <3

canime4ever
04-29-2012, 07:33 PM
Hey... Long time no post... XD Thanks Sylux & Corastaur~ I'm only posting two pics so... yeah...
Hey, I'd like a little help designing an outfit for my OC Panya, think you could help :3? Just pick one of the four in this pic. I think my favorites are on the far sides, and if you don't like any, maybe give some pointers to make them better? http://www.mangatutorials.com/file/pic/photo/2012/04/canime4ever-panya_500.jpg?t=4f9dcde419f31
This one was posing practice, I know the left foot's a bit off, any other noticeable mistakes?
http://th03.deviantart.net/fs70/PRE/i/2012/120/9/8/armani_sketch_by_canime4ever-d4y43z4.jpg



Thanks for viewing~ *On a side note, how do you change the forum title? I forgot @//@ and the title seems awkwardly formal, or just plain awkward XD

Sylux
04-29-2012, 08:52 PM
The far left is deffs my fave!

One thing, in the second one, it seems like his left hand is a bit awkwardly angled. At that that point he would have been extremely uncomfortable. Try to make the shape roll a bit more, as that's sorta what hands do. Super duper cute!

To change the title, edit your original post. Click edit > advanced editor. :)

JJJorgie
04-30-2012, 12:38 AM
I agree with Sylux, the outfit on the far left is the best (in my opinion)!

jaidurn
04-30-2012, 10:47 AM
Man that second one is amazingly cute. The shading looks really nice as well.

Also, I really like the first design. None of the others look like they'd fit the face.

Cloudy
05-01-2012, 10:03 PM
Your art is cute ;3

canime4ever
05-04-2012, 11:10 PM
Thanks so much guys~ Here's another pic to C&C :3

http://fc01.deviantart.net/fs71/f/2012/125/3/5/art_trade__nikki_by_im_just_here-d4ynu9f.jpg
Crap. Forgot to color in the mouth XD

Sylux
05-05-2012, 09:42 AM
Ehhhh, legs seem short maybe? Idk I don't know how to draw girls, lol, just burly men.

Gedeon
05-06-2012, 08:43 AM
Pretty darn good. Although i think that the perspective on the girl could have been a lot better. It seems as the upper body is in the most basic perspective, while the lower part (legs and feet) are is in the same perspective as the background. Also the feet don't match the asphalt....if you know what i mean. Also her left arm, the one in between the legs, is too long i think. Pretty good job. The cell shading is great! Also tell me did you do the bg and then just drew the character on it or did you use perspective lines on the character too?

canime4ever
05-07-2012, 11:59 PM
Thanks Sy & Ged~! I'd change it, but I HATE changing shiz when I'm done. I'll keep that in mind in my next pic though! Speaking of which, I'm having more trouble with perspective ORZ ZOMG ---HUGE--- file XD

Pretty much ignore the 1st pic & I know the foot in the last pic is WAAAYYY off, but pretend it looks decent, k? So out of the 2nd & 3rd pic which would you say is a better use of perspective if I'm wanting it to look like a screen shot from an anime or something... XD I also want to apologize for my awful hand writing...
http://www.mangatutorials.com/file/pic/photo/2012/05/canime4ever-wip-some-help-please.jpg?t=4fa897ff7d4c2