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Allen_Blitz
10-14-2011, 08:23 PM
so um...... tear my work apart i guess
http://th08.deviantart.net/fs70/PRE/i/2011/213/2/2/riku_shapeshifting_by_kiddeath_king-d42edxz.jpg http://th06.deviantart.net/fs71/PRE/i/2011/283/9/b/yukiko_posed_by_kiddeath_king-d4cgs2h.jpg
http://fc04.deviantart.net/fs70/i/2011/283/4/1/slime_morph_by_kiddeath_king-d4cgsnq.jpg http://th04.deviantart.net/fs71/PRE/i/2011/283/b/0/yukiko_got_bloody_by_kiddeath_king-d4cgriy.jpg

Sylux
10-14-2011, 10:06 PM
Just work on proportions. If cartoony is your style, work on something that can break anatomy yet still look generally good to common folk.

Allen_Blitz
10-15-2011, 01:34 AM
thanks, i'll try that!

Allen_Blitz
10-15-2011, 01:33 PM
This is better than the others cause all i did is a bust, a friend also posed for the eyes and mouth placement, which i tweaked. Please tell me what is wrong with it and how i can improve!
http://www.mangatutorials.com/file/pic/photo/2011/10/Allen_Blitz-yukiko-bust-jpg_500.jpg?t=4e99c28c20cc2

Saith
10-15-2011, 03:59 PM
You kinda need to figure out... Well, anatomy.
Look at models - both real and fake. Honestly, I'd study the skeleton first, try drawing it from sources, figure out how everything works, that sort of thing.
After that, read some books about the muscle placements, practise drawing the muscles, where they are, how they act etc. It's pretty general advice, unfortunately, but basically just... I don't know, practise drawing from real-life, GIS some nude models, that sort of thing.

Also, and I don't mean to sound like a dick, but... Boobs don't work that way. Go squeeze your girlfriend's or your mum's something.

e: I'll go make some red-lines now. :)

trilokcool3
10-15-2011, 04:22 PM
for the last drawing i wil sujest you some modifications ,
try making hairs a little bit closer 2 her eyebrow (nt too close or nt too far).

Saith
10-15-2011, 04:37 PM
I got a little... Overzealous, but here you go:

http://i54.tinypic.com/6ycjv5.jpg

Allen_Blitz
10-15-2011, 05:42 PM
thanks, these will help immensly

Allen_Blitz
10-16-2011, 01:55 PM
http://th06.deviantart.net/fs70/PRE/i/2011/289/4/0/riku_angelwings_by_kiddeath_king-d4d0vfv.jpg
arms. hands, legs, and feathers seem off

SuperKasey
10-16-2011, 03:44 PM
Yeah they are. /bricked @.@

The hands look more like paws than hands since the fingers lack definition and correct anatomy. I've seriously filled pages upon pages of dozens of sketchbooks with hands and they are hard as all holy hell to get right. Practice, practice, study and practice some more.

Her arms are bending at highly unnatural angles and seem broken. In this position her upper arms would be beside her breasts (not over the top of them) and to have her hands ending up between her legs both her elbows would be bent outward slightly. Also see how her left shoulder (our right) is right above her breast? The shoulders are actually placed wider apart than the breasts so we don't squish them whenever we move our arms.

I can see what you were trying to do with her front leg, making it shorter, but the perspective in the picture would leave that knee at a slightly lower plane on the page than the far knee. Her calf is far too long as well. When you sit like that your heels end up pretty close to your butt.

I made you a red-line. It's not perfect but it kinda illustrates what I mean.

http://i72.photobucket.com/albums/i163/KTDS/riku_angelwings_by_kiddeath_king-d4d0vfv.jpg

BTW I dig the eyeballs in her shoulders and the teeth in her stomach O.O

NWAP
10-16-2011, 04:38 PM
Maybe a not so obvious tip: try not to push down so hard on your pencil when drawing. The harder you press ,the bolder the line, and the more rigid and stiff your picture will look. keep a slightly loose grip on the pencil, and try and make long smooth light strokes. Odds are you are going to mess up and have to erase when sketching,but, if the lines are light,smooth and under control, they will be much easier to erase and wont leave your sketch looking (overly) messy.

Saith
10-16-2011, 05:06 PM
BTW I dig the eyeballs in her shoulders and the teeth in her stomach O.O

Yup.
Now all she needs is another, more ball-chompingly dangerous set, and we're all set.

Alternatively: Allen_Blitz, or Alien... Bits. Eh? Eh?!

Allen_Blitz
10-16-2011, 08:09 PM
http://th03.deviantart.net/fs71/PRE/i/2011/289/2/c/riku__angelwings_2_0_by_kiddeath_king-d4d2c0x.jpg
the female breast is extremely hard to draw. Tell me if im being paranoid but the hands, wings and eyes seem off.
oh and i usually draw lightly, my erasers suck though T.T

Saith
10-16-2011, 08:16 PM
Yeah.
They're, uh, all off.
If nothing else, the wings look completely 2d - that is, they're on a completely flat plane, while one shoulder is closer to us than the other. Basically, it's... Off.
Fingers don't work that way, and the forearms are much too long. The eyes on her shoulders look flat. Unless they're tattoos, they should be 3d. They dip in, if nothing else.

And yes, breasts are difficult to draw. Practice practice practice. Use naked models off the internet or convince your girlfriend to let you draw her topless.
Or... I don't know. Just get your girlfriend to pose that way, take a picture, and there. You're set.

Gedeon
10-18-2011, 05:43 PM
Well i think that the breasts part is good, but im more concerned with the lack of curvature of the lower torso part. Id say (personal preference so you don't have to take it seriously) more hips.

Allen_Blitz
10-19-2011, 09:37 PM
I have arts that i did on pixel lovely ready for critique
this one i did a few days ago:
http://fc03.deviantart.net/fs70/i/2011/292/c/1/sketch_1_by_kiddeath_king-d4dcuzu.jpg
today after mah field trip:
http://th05.deviantart.net/fs70/PRE/i/2011/292/2/4/sketch_2_by_kiddeath_king-d4dcuvk.jpg

Peteman
10-19-2011, 09:55 PM
Your drawings seem quite 'sketchy,' I think it may look better if you first draw lightly with a harder pen say '2H' and then go over your lines with a softer pen to darken them. This may help lose the roughness.