View Full Version : Critique on my "Pre-Manga"(W.O.P)???!!!

06-20-2011, 09:35 PM
Need a critique on the first 2 panels on the layout and the "art style" I used or if I could of done it better......?

then for my 3rd panel(below)
I need help with drawing that third panel....Its supposed to be a group of 4 scientist that are running through a forest(on a path) with the perspective decreasing further back and the angle of camera is somewhat above them.....help?

but I have no real idea how this is supposed to look.....so yeah....


06-20-2011, 11:45 PM
Ah, I think this sketch is off to a great start. Of course, I also think there are some things that could be improved.

The first panel (the forest) is looking nice and detailed, but if you vary the sizes of the trees, it'll create a feeling of depth that'll really make it pop. Have you considered adding a sense of movement to this panel? Like, the "camera man" is trying to keep up with the chase that's going down? If so, motion lines and kicked up leaves are the way to go.

The second panel is looking awesome, but you should tighten up your one point perspective a bit more. The bent lines where the trees are kinda throw me off. Make 'em all straight! lol. Oh, and motion lines going towards the vanishing point, please.

Finally, I can understand your issue with perception, or not being sure how something should look. The third panel will look awesome if you practice a little technique called foreshortening. Keep that same "bird's eye" view, and utilize foreshortening.

Sorry if this was too much of a read. One last tip I can give you is that you should DEFINITELY use google, flickr, etc to find images you can use as references, especially if you're gonna draw stuff you don't usually draw.

Hope that helps! :-)

06-21-2011, 12:31 AM
thank you,helps alot!:D

06-21-2011, 01:46 AM
W.O.P. is an insult. You should know that.

06-21-2011, 11:02 AM
Bacon get outta here cracka XD