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Jack or Jill?
Jack 33%  33%  [ 2 ]
Jill 67%  67%  [ 4 ]
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 Post subject: The Dog Days Of Jack & Jill [update: ch. 1 complete!]
PostPosted: Mon Oct 11, 2010 3:52 am 
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The Dog Days of Jack & Jill

Jack, a suicidal, teenage perfectionist, gives life a last chance for the summer when he meets Jill, an adrenaline-addicted coked-up delinquent, during a suicide attempt, who promises to convince him to live.

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I've been rambling around the interwebs to get the word out about my webcomic and I thought of returning here, one of my oldest manga communities that I used to frequent when I was a kid, and here I am. :)

The comic is one of dark humor and slice-of-life.
One of my major influences was Fight Club, actually, lots of other films, and bad jokes.
It deals with drugs, suicide, ennui, and battling teenage whining.

I hope you guys will enjoy it!
I'd be glad to hear some of your comments and critiques. :)

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 Post subject: Re: The Dog Days Of Jack & Jill
PostPosted: Mon Oct 11, 2010 2:35 pm 
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I just briefly read the first chapter. That isn't really enough time to make judgments on it, but I can say 2 things: I love the concept, and I'm on the fence about the art. I'm not experienced with art at all, and in no way is it BAD, it just doesn't appeal to me. There seems to be a lot of white space and the characters feel rigid. I've never really liked the super tall/lanky style, but again that's more preference than anything else. It does fit the theme very well, and is very clean as far as I can see.

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 Post subject: Re: The Dog Days Of Jack & Jill
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Thanks, Fenn. :D
I really appreciate you reading it.
I'm glad that you like the plot, so far. It hasn't gotten to developing to the main chunk of the story but I hope I'm off to a good start.

For the art, sorry that my style doesn't appeal to you. Bishounen are what I draw best. :lol:
But with the rigid characters, I've actually been trying to improve that too, since I'm pretty limited on my skill on drawing poses and more natural people.
And yeah, I have a personal preference for negative white space, but hopefully, in the future, I improve on my background drawing skill.

Thanks again for your comment. :D

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 Post subject: Re: The Dog Days Of Jack & Jill
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Jill looks like a boy to me, she's got the spikey anime hair thing going.

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 Post subject: Re: The Dog Days Of Jack & Jill
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Jill looks like a boy to me, she's got the spikey anime hair thing going.


So Jill IS female? I figured he was using it unisexually, since Jill seems like an eccentric kid anyway. If it is a girl, I suggest more curves and a more feminine face: eyelashes (even if subtle) and a little shorter, more rounded chin. The design doesn't need to be altered too drastically.

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 Post subject: Re: The Dog Days Of Jack & Jill
PostPosted: Tue Oct 12, 2010 6:13 pm 
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Bacon, Jill's definitely of the male gender. The name's just misleading. :D

Fenn, yup. He's one very eccentric kid.

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Yes, incredibly, though, (s)he is in the men's room, so I guess that should clear things up.

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 Post subject: Re: The Dog Days Of Jack & Jill
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Yes, incredibly, though, (s)he is in the men's room, so I guess that should clear things up.


:shock: Well that definitely makes sense of things...

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 Post subject: Re: The Dog Days Of Jack & Jill
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Updated!
Page thirteen is now posted. :D

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Fenn wrote:
Bacon Barbarian wrote:
Yes, incredibly, though, (s)he is in the men's room, so I guess that should clear things up.


:shock: Well that definitely makes sense of things...

I'd say.

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 Post subject: Re: The Dog Days Of Jack & Jill
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Updated!
Page thirteen is now posted. :D


Wow. I was debating whether to wait for more before reading, but I'm glad I didn't. That one page gave some huge insight into the Jack's character.

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 Post subject: Re: The Dog Days Of Jack & Jill
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I'm glad you got to learn more about Jack, Fenn. : D
I'd be happy to hear what you think of him, actually.
But it's pretty early in the story. :lol:

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And updated again!
Page fourteen is now up!

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 Post subject: Re: The Dog Days Of Jack & Jill [update: pg. 14]
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 Post subject: Re: The Dog Days Of Jack & Jill [update: pg. 15]
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