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 Post subject: Random story
PostPosted: Wed Apr 14, 2010 7:14 pm 
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It's more of a short story of my personal F.F. based on the movie and manga "Battle Royale". I don't recommend this to kids, due to certain reasons. Its unusual to call people by their first names in the Japanese culture, but I'm using it anyways since I'm lazy. I personally like the movie version more. But the second movie didn't have it's touch...
Day 1: The Beginning
1:50 AM UNKNOWN ISLAND LOCATION- BUILDING- SCHOOL
The students began to wake up one by one as they noticed their collars on their necks. They started to panic, and not knowing what was happening, they looked outside the window, only to find lights flashing outside with several soldiers of the military guarding the building. Hearing footsteps outside the door approaching, they looked back to see their teacher walking in with a clipboard. Two soldiers followed behind him as they held their guns ready to shoot. The students started to panic as they suddenly stepped back, surprised at what was going on.
Breaking the silence, one of the students, Susumu, stepped up. "Oi, what the heck is going on here sensei? This has to be a joke right? I mean, you guys really wouldn't-"
"Shut up!" The teacher immediatly took out a pistol from his pocket and shot the student in the head, as he slowly fell down to the ground. Everyone screamed in terror, but the soldiers shot into the ceiling to make them silent. They whimpered in fear as the teacher began to talk. "Because of kids like you, we initiated the BR ACT. Does anyone know what is it?" Seeing no one answered, he continued. "The BR ACT was a rule enforced in Japan in order to stop students from skipping school. You! Be quiet!" He threw a knife at a girl who fell to the ground surprised. Other girls around her shrieked and spread away from the body of blood. The teacher continued as he told them about the rule. A class is chosen within 1,000 selected classes and are sent to a remote island to kill each other in a game in order to survive. THe time limit is 3 days, each student is supplied with their own "unique" weapon and are sent out to fight for survival. ONly one can win.
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"This video will explain the rules of the game." One of the soldiers took out a remote and pressed a button.
"Hello! You're one of the lucky few who have been chosen for this game!" A midde-aged woman appeared on the t.v. as the students began to watch. Later, now that the students knew the rules of the game, the teacher began to call their names one by one, each one receiving a bag with food, water, supplies, a "unique" weapon, and a map to look out for danger zones, areas that when the person with a collar is in, the collar will explode instantly killing the person. One by one, the students left, some saddened, some scared, and some determined to survive and kill everyone in their path.
"Well, let the game begin." The teacher said as he looked on a screen of the island, each with dots showing the locations of each student.
Status:
Boy #14 Susumu (blank) Dead
Girl # 3 (blank) Dead
40 more to go.

I actually got very lazy on this one. I think it's because I haven't had much sleep lately. I think I'll edit this later to make it more what I wanted.
NOW LET THE FLAMINGS OF MY WRITING BEGIN!!!
P.S. It's supposed to be short.

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 Post subject: Re: Random story
PostPosted: Tue May 04, 2010 1:50 pm 
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cool story .. should be cool if you made a manga about it :)

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 Post subject: Re: Random story
PostPosted: Wed May 05, 2010 1:44 am 
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Interesting story. I think that is is way too reminiscent of Battle Royale (have you read the book, too?). Some tense-related discrepancies here and there could be fixed. My major qualm with this is that I fear that it will be quite unoriginal.


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 Post subject: Re: Random story
PostPosted: Thu May 06, 2010 1:47 pm 
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Makes me think of Hunger Games to an extent. But I like it! ^^


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 Post subject: Re: Random story
PostPosted: Thu May 06, 2010 5:53 pm 
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Hunger Games seems like a bizarre spinoff of the original book, Battle Royale, though.


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