That last one's pretty good. You referenced it?
Mmkay. Critiques . . .
While the overall picture looks very good, the lines are still a bit sketchy. Almost unavoidable with a pencil, though. Do you ever ink stuff?
It might just be a style thing, but I think the eyelashes (upper and lower lines, not necessarily lashes) could use a bit of thickening. This example
is a pretty extreme way of demonstrating that, but you can play around with it.
When you shade stuff, try to make your strokes more consistent--like, all of them going the same way, all the same tone.
Last thing I see: the outline of the hair could use some defining. Usually, if you define it lightly when you start, chances are you're gonna have to redefine it once you've got all your shading done.
Yes, I used a reference.
This is it.
No, I feel if I tried, I might silly goose it up badly. As for the lines, well, I kept forgetting to sharpen my pencil, so that might be the cause, I'm not sure, though.
Well, that's another thing I thought I'd silly goose up badly, eyelashes, didn't want her to come out, well, too made up.
Well, as you know, shading can be tiresome, and I meant to do a really good job, but I got really impatient with it, so I shaded as fast as possible to get it done. Which lead to my last mistake.
Thanks for the critique.