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 Post subject: Re: (2) Andrei's Art - back again and new pictures!
PostPosted: Sat May 22, 2010 11:01 pm 
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dagreenpillow: Fat!? O_o , I draw normal girls , not fat and not skinny , maybe I got and some pictures with some girls a little fat made for a classmate but those pictures are few.

Anyway , I drawed more since a new contest on DA has started ^__^

Here is my work in progress:

Initial Sketch and fast color :)

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Critique requested!!!

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 Post subject: Re: (3) Andrei's Art - FEZ contest WIP - Comment and Critic!
PostPosted: Sun May 23, 2010 6:16 am 
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great pic^^
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what wrong with flat chest?
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 Post subject: Re: (3) Andrei's Art - FEZ contest WIP - I NEED YOUR HELP!!
PostPosted: Wed May 26, 2010 10:51 pm 
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PLEASE C&C I NEED TO KNOW IF SOMENTHIG ITS WRONG :)

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 Post subject: Re: (3) Andrei's Art - FEZ contest WIP - I NEED YOUR HELP!!
PostPosted: Thu May 27, 2010 12:19 am 
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Aight, well heres my critique.

The Good, You have improve on some aspect of anatomy. The lighting in some area is well done, such as the arm gauntlet. There are some nice textures in there,

Now the parts that could be improve.

I find the pose relatively dull, and uninteresting. Theres no emotion, no motion, it just lack that captivity to capture peoples attention. You need to span on this area. Make her more lose, less up tight. Try to bend the body more. Give more flexibility.

The design seems somewhat unique, but its not depicted enough. One thing that I've some to notice with your works are that, majority of the girls are wearing tight clothes. Which is not a problem! Its just that you need to drop some things. ie for this one, the cloth that stretches across her breast. If it were a tight fit, we wouldn't have been able to see the cleavage.

Another thing I've come to notice with your art is that It lacks depth. I believe I've mention this in the past, but this time, I've figure it out. When you draw costume, you gave it minimum projection to the respective object. Causing the outfit to look like its part of her body, rather then a piece of armor, or clothes, that is attach to the body.

As for the details and colours. The heavy out line is really flattening out the piece. You can try reducing the thickness of the line art or colour in the lines. If you want to create small details, try working with a higher resolution. (My usual canvas is A4 with 300 dpi)

Heres a paint over, red line, and my version that i did to give you a better idea of what im saying.

http://i16.photobucket.com/albums/b25/p ... dr3ytp.jpg

The paint over covers the lighting and colouring aspects, red line to show you what I mean when i was talking about the lack of depth, and my version, to show you what can be done to the pose to make it more interesting.

Hope this helps man! And good luck to your contest :D


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 Post subject: Re: (3) Andrei's Art - FEZ contest WIP - I NEED YOUR HELP!!
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Thats what I need to hear , It help a lot :) I think I will remake it after your suggestions , and thanks again.

I finished it but I will remake it soon.

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 Post subject: Re: (3) Andrei's Art - FEZ contest WIP - I NEED YOUR HELP!!
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I decided to not remake that picture and make an new one after becoming very popular after I submit it to DA , so here its the sketch for the next entry , I'm very open to critiques and suggestions :)

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Paint Tool SAI + Genius MousePen 8x6 inch , around 2 hours of work

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 Post subject: Re: (3) Andrei's Art - Fantasy Earth Zero - sexy mages :D
PostPosted: Sat May 29, 2010 11:18 pm 
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Am I ignored ? here is a wip to the second FEZ contest entry :)

http://andr3ytp.deviantart.com/art/FEZ- ... -165777668

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 Post subject: Re: (3) Andrei's Art - do I'm ignored ?
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Again, she looks pretty fat to me ._. I don't really know how to crit properly XD but really she looks fat and her breast looks a bit flat.

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 Post subject: Re: (3) Andrei's Art - do I'm ignored ?
PostPosted: Sun May 30, 2010 1:22 pm 
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Fat? I don't think she looks fat. I will say that 1) Your art is wonderful, I love the use of blue and light but the way her silly goose (in the previous drawing) look, they seemed bunched up in the front and sorta smooshed together. You need to make her silly goose fall a little more naturally upon her chest, not as "Look at dem boobies!" but as a sort of icing to her beautiful shape. Other than that, I love her curves, totally beautiful use of a hood too!


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 Post subject: Re: (3) Andrei's Art - do I'm ignored ?
PostPosted: Sun May 30, 2010 1:48 pm 
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I think her silly goose need to stick out more, particularly her left one. Though I do love everything else, especially the colouring. :)

EDIT: Unless your characters aren't wearing bras?

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 Post subject: Re: (3) Andrei's Art - do I'm ignored ?
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really like the pose on that last one

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 Post subject: Re: (3) Andrei's Art - do I'm ignored ?
PostPosted: Sun May 30, 2010 3:20 pm 
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dagreenpillow wrote:
Again, she looks pretty fat to me ._. I don't really know how to crit properly XD but really she looks fat and her breast looks a bit flat.

What's wrong with not having stick-thin characters?


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 Post subject: Re: (3) Andrei's Art - do I'm ignored ?
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I don't think its fat. I think its the way you shade the belly that gives the impression of having a flap over the belly.

The shades done exactly goes in a circuliar motion. Girls have Abs too. Hint hint ;D


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 Post subject: Re: (3) Andrei's Art - do I'm ignored ?
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dagreenpillow: once again I say that shes normal not fat :) .. and I will fix soon the problem with her breats
Second_Empire: thanks!
goggyThx! and what mean *silly goose* ? on google the translation was "stupid duck" lolz
GunZetThanks! your not the only one :)
Celestial-Fox: I thought that everyone like skinny people ... my characters are just normal not skinny or fat.
doghateburger: I will fix it to the next update :)

fat ppl look like that > http://fatgrrl.com/wp-content/FatGirl_F ... 0Nov06.jpg

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 Post subject: Re: (3) Andrei's Art - my girls aren't fat!!!
PostPosted: Thu Jun 03, 2010 12:22 pm 
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lol, I think you have the censor on. I meant B R E A S T S. Not silly goose. :P

I'll say it again, I love your art. <3

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